So this character faints so much that she'll always place one of her hands in between her face before she hits the ground? Oh well I never seen fainting in real life, but I think I almost did once. Anyway it was a good first TF sequence, I hope I run into more of your work sometime later.

Woops. Sorry. :(
I just wanted to to look cute for a last panel~

It's fine. Actually she really does look cute.

Souldn't the number in the title be 7?

Aghh! I fail! Thanks for letting me know. *hits own head with her hoof*

This is quite good for your first transformation sequence. The drawing is fairly good (a little inconsistent occasionally, and the anatomy could use a little work, but that will come with practice), and I love your use of color. The way the panel borders gradually become red over the first few pages is a nice touch - it's an elegant way to emphasize the growing trauma of the transformation. I think it might be better if the border colors continued all the way to the end. You set up a good progression of brown to red in the first few pages, but that does make the diagonal black border in page 5 seem a bit incongruous. (The diagonal border does add to the feeling of dizziness on that page, but you might be able to do the same thing by tilting individual panels or tilting the "camera" angle of the pictures instead. The fact that that's the only diagonal line in the sequence makes it a bit jarring.) The colored borders have such a strong effect on the first pages of the sequence that I'd like to see them continued to the end - maybe shading through a sickly purple for the fainting part and ending on a peaceful blue. Something like that.

I agree with some of the earlier comments - the sequence could use some more transitional shots, especially on page 4. (There might even be enough going on on that page to split it into two pages; a lot of transformations are going on at once.) It's possible to figure out what's changing, but it's not immediately obvious. We see hands with black on them, then hooves, but we have to guess at what happened in between. Keeping the focus on what's changing would also help. Her forehooves are nearly out of the frame in the panel where we first see them finished; her hind hooves are barely visible at all; her hair is obvious in the first few pages, not visible in page 3, and mostly gone by page 4. Again, we can tell what's changing if we look, but our attention isn't drawn to it. One or two more stages in the transformation of her face would be nice too.

This is quite a good transformation sequence overall, though, and the way you've used the comic format is more complex and creative than a lot of sequences I've seen. I'd love to see you do more transformations; this is a great start.

Thank you sosososooooo much for the critique! This gives me a LOT more to work with than a one-liner (as I call them. Things like "This need more work." lol).
To tell you the truth, when I'm drawing something for fun, I really lazy up when it comes to things like anatomy and keeping up with colors. This TF was for fun, but I'll get down to business on the next one! Thank you again!

One of the cutest TF sequences I've seen in a while. Loved it. :D

WElcome to the furry world. Doe. :D

*Glomps!* Awwh shucks!

*stag-hugs back warmly* :)

Ok, I've seen quite a bit of TF art, and tend to search FA for more awesome TF art, so I'll share a bit of what I tend to notice works well for TF artists (In my own opinion).

just going on what changes when, the head is usually the most prominent change in a TF, and as a result, it's typically one of the last changes to happen. different people have different opinions on what should change when, and as a result, that's not anything to change your style over. Just a random note, but going off of that a bit more, the changes tend to not happen in one static line. There's more fluidity in the change. The hands will start changing around the same time as the feet, which is only a few seconds or so before the tail. The sequence is a sequence, but it's also a sort of interweaving chain. It doesn't all have to be one after the next.

Hooves are an oddity in the TF community. I agree with what someone previously said about more transition, but for hooves, it tends to apply much more. Since there aren't exactly digits with hooves, it involves a sort of fusing of the digits in question. I believe it went from semi-black hands to straight-up hooves, without really showing any of the in-betweens. That's sort of one of the key aspects of TF art, the transitions. Showing the shift from human to furry/animal, and all the in-between changes. I just looked back at the full sequence, and it was a lot of straight changing. I'd say the transitions and fluidity of the TF are the most important things to work on.

Overall, though, it's looking good. =^_^=

Sorry if I babbled a bit. I tend to do that sometimes.

Not at all, critiques and observations should be thorough!

Thank you for the feedback! ^w^ I've been looking more TF art as well. Hopefully I can get a better idea of the norm from doing so! (Lol, Transformation and 'the norm' are two words that shouldn't be used together. XD)

Thank you again~

You're welcome! Always willing to encourage/assist in the creation of more clean TF art. Though my media is stories. =^_^=

Interesting. You got lucky in avoiding that "Hulk gene". It's pure torture on outfits.

Inorite? Luckily I managed to save most of this one! And it's my favourite outfit, too!

In fact, since it's now a survivor, you have the wonderful opportunity to create 'doe alternative' outfits that can fit snugly and fully survive the alteration effect. It truly is a unique opportunity.

Now, I can say, first hand, that those Levi icons with two horses failing to rip apart a pair of pants is pure fantasy...at least in today's version.

SNIFFLE, ERNA FEELS SO FAT NOW, LOL ;w; *begins sewing*

*glares in silence* "Every doe I've ever known, went into winter with that layer of life. That's how I can see them, once rut hits. If anything, Humans that need to be one day away from skin and bones...baffles me."

*eyes widening* "You're stunningly gorgeous."

*Faints suddenly*
Oh mon Dieu, monsieur! Ces flatteries!

*gasps, averting eyes*