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Username: Big_Mama
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Type of Response wanted: Constructive Criticism, Redlines, Tips, Advice.
Artist's Comments: An old sketch that I've asked for help on, but never got a response. It's been left as is for 2 years because I suck at horses.
He's meant to be a gigantic Percheron/Frisian cross. He's more of an intimidating type of creature than a graceful runner.
This was a horse I adopted from a friend back in '07. Was nothing but a coloured headshot, with no physical description when I adopted it. Decided to make it a draft horse myself. But I kept avoiding drawing it because I don't do well with drawing horses.
I need quite a bit of help with the body, hooves, and maybe the face.
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zydala
Larger/Original Version: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4780642/
Type of Response wanted: Constructive Criticism, Redlines, Tips, Advice.
Artist's Comments: An old sketch that I've asked for help on, but never got a response. It's been left as is for 2 years because I suck at horses.
He's meant to be a gigantic Percheron/Frisian cross. He's more of an intimidating type of creature than a graceful runner.
This was a horse I adopted from a friend back in '07. Was nothing but a coloured headshot, with no physical description when I adopted it. Decided to make it a draft horse myself. But I kept avoiding drawing it because I don't do well with drawing horses.
I need quite a bit of help with the body, hooves, and maybe the face.
~
zydala
Category Artwork (Traditional) / Animal related (non-anthro)
Species Horse
Size 1020 x 788px
File Size 308.9 kB
It looks really good to me, but I'm horrible with animal bodies to begin with. I like how stocky it seems more than anything.
the face is a bit off, one cheek is higher than the other and one eye's a bit deeper than the other, so fixing the symmatry will definitely help. Also one ear is higher than the other. I know what you're trying to do there but they should root at the same place even if they go in different directions.
the face is a bit off, one cheek is higher than the other and one eye's a bit deeper than the other, so fixing the symmatry will definitely help. Also one ear is higher than the other. I know what you're trying to do there but they should root at the same place even if they go in different directions.
The whole horse is leaning. Streighten out the legs and place the hooves more under the body and less skewed to the side.
I also agree with what Pouncewhisper said about the head. Although, I do like how the one ear is set off from the other. Shows typical horse mannerisms. The right ear could still be moved up a bit.
The lower part of the legs look a bit too bulky. I haven't seen any images of this breed, so forgive me if I'm off with this part, but my general conception of horse legs show them a bit thinner near the hooves.
Now, something that would help with the symatry of the face is using basic shapes. For the upper part, I would have used a circle and then worked out some lines from there to make the rest of the head. Once the basics are down, its like skulpting by working the main lines around your basic form. I see you already did some guidlines on the ground for the feet, however I wish you would have continued with the guildines on the rest of the body (unless its all very lightly done and the scanner didn't pick it up.)
I also agree with what Pouncewhisper said about the head. Although, I do like how the one ear is set off from the other. Shows typical horse mannerisms. The right ear could still be moved up a bit.
The lower part of the legs look a bit too bulky. I haven't seen any images of this breed, so forgive me if I'm off with this part, but my general conception of horse legs show them a bit thinner near the hooves.
Now, something that would help with the symatry of the face is using basic shapes. For the upper part, I would have used a circle and then worked out some lines from there to make the rest of the head. Once the basics are down, its like skulpting by working the main lines around your basic form. I see you already did some guidlines on the ground for the feet, however I wish you would have continued with the guildines on the rest of the body (unless its all very lightly done and the scanner didn't pick it up.)
Body: Needs to be a snip longer between the back of the shoulder and the front end of the haunch.
Legs: Should go straight up and down under the shoulders for this stance. The back legs will go out a bit, almost like he's leaning a bit forward on them. http://www.ansi.okstate.edu/breeds/.....n/Stallion.jpg For example, though you can get poses all over the place online, this one seems to be the standard standing line of a Percheron type animal. Lining the legs up thusly should help greatly with the balance and stop the leaning. Lengthening them out a bit will also add to the proper stance. He almost looks more like Cattle than a horse in this. I know you're going for "stocky" but that can be addressed with larger joints and more pronounced muscling rather than short length.
Head: Other than the editing needed on the cheeks that have already been addressed by others, the placement and neck lines seem off to me. The neck seems like it bulges just a wee bit too much over the top of his head, and might do with a bit more length on it as well. As I said with the legs, stocky doesn't have to mean stubby. :)
On another note, I LOVE the tail. So few people I've seen actually draw in the fleshed part and just draw hair over it.
Hope this helps!
Legs: Should go straight up and down under the shoulders for this stance. The back legs will go out a bit, almost like he's leaning a bit forward on them. http://www.ansi.okstate.edu/breeds/.....n/Stallion.jpg For example, though you can get poses all over the place online, this one seems to be the standard standing line of a Percheron type animal. Lining the legs up thusly should help greatly with the balance and stop the leaning. Lengthening them out a bit will also add to the proper stance. He almost looks more like Cattle than a horse in this. I know you're going for "stocky" but that can be addressed with larger joints and more pronounced muscling rather than short length.
Head: Other than the editing needed on the cheeks that have already been addressed by others, the placement and neck lines seem off to me. The neck seems like it bulges just a wee bit too much over the top of his head, and might do with a bit more length on it as well. As I said with the legs, stocky doesn't have to mean stubby. :)
On another note, I LOVE the tail. So few people I've seen actually draw in the fleshed part and just draw hair over it.
Hope this helps!
Well, for someone who claims to be terrible at horses, this is superb!!!! I have seen people draw human faces on equines...drives me nuts! However, that being said, the legs should be longer, the hindquarters longer, and bulkier, the knees and...I don't know what you call the middle joint on the back leg, I always called it the "elbow" should be larger and more pronounced. The head looks nicely done...one "shape trick" is to create one large circle or oval, and one smaller one, for the forehead and muzzle, and make lines connecting. One ear is lower than the other, but personally, I think it gives him character. Everyone has one leg shorter, one arm or finger or toe shorter..I think the off skewered ear could be his trademark? He is leaning back alot. His hooves, also, look like they belong on an Arab, not a draft, they need to be bigger, sturdier, and stouter, and the far hind leg and the near hind leg need to match, preferably with the thickness of the far hind leg, as it is proportioned better.
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