Yes you did.
This story radiates happiness and joy in their purest forms.

Thank you, reading this brightened up an otherwise gloomy day.

I'm very glad to hear that. Now I can go to sleep with a smile on my own face. ^^

very very wonderful - a good beginning for much more...

V.

*smiles* I'm glad you thought wonderful was the appropriate word. :D

Interesting, and rather unique. It was a bit hard to follow some of the individual details, but as a whole it made plenty of sense.

*nods?* What individual details in particular? I'd really like to know. ^^

I'm not sure I phrased it well, perhaps a better way to put it is that some of the individual details made it hard to follow. Everything taken as a additive whole suggests a solid story line, but taken individually some of the paragraphs seem a little fragmented with details / imagery that I didn't fit. However, this could just be because I'm unfamiliar with your story line - I know a lot of my stuff comes out really unclear because I often forget that 90% of my material is still in my head and no where else.

Don't get me wrong, I'm not attempting to be overly critical; not do I make any pretenses of actually having the credibility to make serious critique. I just try to offer an honest opinion as often as I can, because I know they can be hard to come upon as a writer here.

Oh, no, I am glad to get honest critique! But, I'm still not 100% clear on what you're saying. Is it because there are details in the little snippet that aren't explained anywhere, or something else?

Upon further consideration, I decided I might be succumbing to tunnel-vision; so I re-read for a fresh perspective - And I must say that it read much better the second time through, after I already knew the basic storyline. It seems you were going for a more diffuse and atmospheric feel that was, as a result, more description-heavy that I was expecting.

Personally, I don't like to submit in .txt because the text shows up before your description. In visual work (which this site is heavily geared towards), it isn't as big a problem, but I think you'd be hard-pressed to find someone who scrolls down through all that writing to read your description before the main piece. So, especially in the instance of a more non-traditional piece like this, the reader goes through the whole thing and THEN reads the description and puts everything together - thus the perceived fragmentation I quoted earlier. Putting everything in the description box give you the option to type in your description ahead of the story itself - Take a look at how Panzergulo submits, he does it brilliantly.

I highly prefer people to read my works before reading the description. I never read descriptions first because people often accidentally spoil the content of the story in either the description or the tags... But to each their own. ^^;

*nods* That's a fair way to look at it. n.n

Loved it. when you do this kind of thing the whole story shines with you. *hugs*

*hugs and giggles* Shiny is good...