Well I'm no music guy, but here's something:
1. The lead instrument (whatevear it was) seems to be overpowering.
2. It sounds like a classic video game stage. A platformer one.
3. Reminds me of another song I like: Airwave by ReX, from DJ Max Technika 2

well the lead instrument is supposed to be overpowering... like even with there's a lot of things happening around you.. there's that single thing that you really feel and wanna expressed inside.. and you feel like everything is going great then until you finally loose yourself.. and even with that last hope... no one can save you...

I'm really digging this, but the lead would be better just a little quieter. I totally understand what you're going for, but I'd like to be able to appreciate what is going on underneath it as well

Aw thanks :D .. i'll make the lead quiter :D

It sounds kind of... Uhh... Typical. Not really sure how to describe it. Then again, it's techno so...

It kind of reminds me of that song on O2Jam, but I forgot the title.

The music sounds horror-ish or something that could be played for a boss battle in a video game. The title kind of turns me off from the piece though, since it sounds like something that some angsty teenager would pop out.