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Team Rose had done it; they had been teleported into the sky, climbed to the top of Sky Tower, and 'convinced' Rayquaza to blow up the meteor. They had saved the world.
And now, back on the ground, everyone is celebrating; Beacon is checking Compass for injuries, Gengar is pretending he didn't just save their lives, and Alice breathes a sigh of relief... until they start to feel strange.
"Thorn?" Compass says. "Hey, are you okay?"
Alice looks down at their hand as it begins to turn transparent. "I'm sorry, I forgot to tell you. Now that my 'role' is finished, I'm... going back to my own world."
"W-wait, what?! Going back?! But we just fixed everything! We can be a rescue team again! Please, don't leave!"
Alice's body starts fading away. "Sorry, I don't think I have a choice. This is goodbye, partner."
"No!" Compass lunges forward, wrapping their arms around Alice as if they could keep them from fading. "Please, no! You're the best friend I've ever had! Please don't leave again!"
"There is a way," Xatu says, and all eyes turn toward him. "If you both wish, and wish very strongly, you may meet again."
"You'll... You'll wish, right?" Compass looks at Alice, crying. "You'll wish to come back, right?!"
"I..." They don't want to leave Compass. They don't want to go back to their old life, always in danger, always struggling. They want to live here, but... "I..."
Suddenly, Compass's arms pass through Alice, as they begin floating into the air. Up and up, away from Compass, until they disappear into the sky.
It's been two weeks, and everything is getting better. The disasters are becoming weaker and less frequent; buildings are being repaired; rescue jobs are less common; and injuries, both from the disasters and... others, are healing.
And Compass has wished. Every day, they wished so strongly to see Alice again. It was hard for the first few days; Compass was so devastated that they wouldn't speak. But they weren't alone; they had their mom and Team Arrow to support them, and keep them company.
But the worst part isn't that Alice is gone. The worst part is that no matter how strongly Compass wishes... they never come back.
And now, standing in Tiny Woods, Compass understands. Alice has their own life in their world. It was selfish to demand that they stay, and just abandon everything they had. Alice is home now... where they're supposed to be. It wouldn't be right for them to live here. This is how things are meant to be.
And yet, despite everything, Compass can't suppress the longing that burns in their heart, begging to see their partner just one more time. And so, with all their heart... they wish.
A flash of light consumes the woodland path. And when Compass's eyes recover, standing before them... is a familiar cubone.
Alice looks down at themself, seeing their brown hide, wagging their old tail, and they jump into the air with a fist pump! "Hell yeah, I'm back baby!"
"THOOOOORN!!!" Compass runs circles around Alice, jumping up and down, flapping their arms so hard they might just fly away! "Thorn! Thorn, Thorn, Thorn Thorn Thorn Thorn ThornThornThornThornThorn!!" They run right in front of Alice and raise their arms! "You're back!"
Alice raises their arms. "I'm back!"
"I missed you so much!"
"Oh my god, I missed you too!" Alice steps forward and embraces Compass- and immediately lets go and steps back. "Whoops! Wrong partner, sorry!"
"Hug me all you want, I'm just glad I can finally see you again! I was so scared; no matter how much I wished, it never worked. I was afraid you didn't want to come back."
"Yeah, sorry about that. I felt you wishing for me every day, but I couldn't come back until I- Oh shit that's right!" Alice looks around in a panic, before turning around and seeing a cubone on the ground behind them. "Oh my god it actually worked!"
The cubone groans as they start to stand. "Ugh, would you please quiet down? I'm... W-what in the-" The cubone jumps to their feet. "Where am I!? What happened!?"
"Yeah, dimensional travel is pretty disorienting first time around. You okay?"
"Wha-" The cubone readies their club and steps back. "Who are you?! Where is Alice?!"
Alice raises their arms. "It's me! I'm Alice!" They lunge forward and embrace the cubone. "I'm so glad you're finally here Rose!"
Rose immediately suplexes Alice, leaving them groaning on the ground.
"ugh... that's my good little barbarian..."
"Oh my god, Alice!" Rose helps Alice up. "What... What happened?! Where are we?! Why in the world are you a cubone?!"
"1, we're safe, 2, we're safe, and 3... I'm actually not sure why I'm still a cubone, but it's so cool to finally understand you!"
"What do you mean we're safe? And who is that!?" Rose points her club at Compass.
"No, Rose, you don't get it, we're SAFE. That could be literally anyone and it'd be fine. This entire world is so safe, you won't believe it. But also, that's my friend Compass."
"Uh, hi," Compass says. "So um, you're Alice's partner Rose? It's great to meet you! But uh, Alice... What actually happened?"
"Well," Alice says, "you just helped me pull off an interdimensional heist/rescue mission! Seriously, we were so screwed, your timing was perfect. So Rose! This is Compass, they were my partner while I was trapped in another world and also lost my memory. I would kill for them."
"Please don't."
"Wait," Rose says, "trapped in a... what?"
"Yeah, didn't have time to explain before, but I have so much to tell you! And Compass! I have my memory back! I have so much to tell both of you!"
"Alright, do you have a hideout here where we can talk safely?"
"Rose. Buddy. You're not getting it. There's food everywhere, the jobs pay a ton, they'll hire random people off the street, and the punishment for stealing is community service THAT THEY ALSO PAY YOU FOR! We're SAFE here!"
"SURPRISE ATTACK!!" A rattata leaps out from behind a tree, claws ready, and Rose whips around and smacks them out of the air with her club. They fall to the ground, unconscious.
"... See how easy that was!?" Alice says. "No one here is a serious threat, and most people are straight-up KIND! We don't need to survive here. We can just live."
"Um, Thorn?" Compass says. "What are you talking about?"
"Oh Compass, now that I have my memories back, I have got some SHIT to tell you. I am NEVER going back home again."
The three members of Team Rose pull on a rope, lifting a young shinx out of a hole. "Are you okay?" Compass asks once the shinx is safe.
"Yeah." Shinx breathes a sigh of relief. "Thanks."
Rose turns to Alice. "So Alice, how-"
"ALICE!?!" Shinx gasps, almost stumbling back into the hole. "Y-you mean Alice the Human?!"
Alice smiles. "In the flesh. Don't worry, I wasn't actually causing the apocalypse. And as for my various assaults, while I did definitely stab many people, I got pardoned for those after I punched god in the face."
"... You WHAT!?!"
"Thorn, stop," Compass says, "you're scaring them." Compass starts escorting Shinx back to town, while Alice and Rose trail behind.
"Alice, as I was saying," Rose says, "how much are we getting paid for this job?"
"300 coins."
"... Right. Better question, how much food could that buy?"
Alice smiles. "About 3 days worth."
"I see, that is pretty good. So split between the three of us, as long as we do a mission every day-"
"That was split between the three of us."
"... WHAT?!"
"Yup. Welcome to our new home."
Okay so maybe it's a little rushed to have the goodbye and the reunion happen in the same chapter, but at least it's pretty accurate to the source material right? Anyway, I think that ties up all the lose ends. If there's any questions you still want answered, please post them on Team Rose's Official Rescue Team Q&A!
Also, I doubt anyone noticed (because I sure didn't), but when I switched computers recently, I lost some fonts, so the thumbnails have been in a less fun-looking font for the past 7 chapters. Oops. I'll fix those soon probably.
If you enjoyed the story, please comment! I love hearing responses to my writing! What was your favorite part?
Chapter 25
HomeTeam Rose had done it; they had been teleported into the sky, climbed to the top of Sky Tower, and 'convinced' Rayquaza to blow up the meteor. They had saved the world.
And now, back on the ground, everyone is celebrating; Beacon is checking Compass for injuries, Gengar is pretending he didn't just save their lives, and Alice breathes a sigh of relief... until they start to feel strange.
"Thorn?" Compass says. "Hey, are you okay?"
Alice looks down at their hand as it begins to turn transparent. "I'm sorry, I forgot to tell you. Now that my 'role' is finished, I'm... going back to my own world."
"W-wait, what?! Going back?! But we just fixed everything! We can be a rescue team again! Please, don't leave!"
Alice's body starts fading away. "Sorry, I don't think I have a choice. This is goodbye, partner."
"No!" Compass lunges forward, wrapping their arms around Alice as if they could keep them from fading. "Please, no! You're the best friend I've ever had! Please don't leave again!"
"There is a way," Xatu says, and all eyes turn toward him. "If you both wish, and wish very strongly, you may meet again."
"You'll... You'll wish, right?" Compass looks at Alice, crying. "You'll wish to come back, right?!"
"I..." They don't want to leave Compass. They don't want to go back to their old life, always in danger, always struggling. They want to live here, but... "I..."
Suddenly, Compass's arms pass through Alice, as they begin floating into the air. Up and up, away from Compass, until they disappear into the sky.
It's been two weeks, and everything is getting better. The disasters are becoming weaker and less frequent; buildings are being repaired; rescue jobs are less common; and injuries, both from the disasters and... others, are healing.
And Compass has wished. Every day, they wished so strongly to see Alice again. It was hard for the first few days; Compass was so devastated that they wouldn't speak. But they weren't alone; they had their mom and Team Arrow to support them, and keep them company.
But the worst part isn't that Alice is gone. The worst part is that no matter how strongly Compass wishes... they never come back.
And now, standing in Tiny Woods, Compass understands. Alice has their own life in their world. It was selfish to demand that they stay, and just abandon everything they had. Alice is home now... where they're supposed to be. It wouldn't be right for them to live here. This is how things are meant to be.
And yet, despite everything, Compass can't suppress the longing that burns in their heart, begging to see their partner just one more time. And so, with all their heart... they wish.
A flash of light consumes the woodland path. And when Compass's eyes recover, standing before them... is a familiar cubone.
Alice looks down at themself, seeing their brown hide, wagging their old tail, and they jump into the air with a fist pump! "Hell yeah, I'm back baby!"
"THOOOOORN!!!" Compass runs circles around Alice, jumping up and down, flapping their arms so hard they might just fly away! "Thorn! Thorn, Thorn, Thorn Thorn Thorn Thorn ThornThornThornThornThorn!!" They run right in front of Alice and raise their arms! "You're back!"
Alice raises their arms. "I'm back!"
"I missed you so much!"
"Oh my god, I missed you too!" Alice steps forward and embraces Compass- and immediately lets go and steps back. "Whoops! Wrong partner, sorry!"
"Hug me all you want, I'm just glad I can finally see you again! I was so scared; no matter how much I wished, it never worked. I was afraid you didn't want to come back."
"Yeah, sorry about that. I felt you wishing for me every day, but I couldn't come back until I- Oh shit that's right!" Alice looks around in a panic, before turning around and seeing a cubone on the ground behind them. "Oh my god it actually worked!"
The cubone groans as they start to stand. "Ugh, would you please quiet down? I'm... W-what in the-" The cubone jumps to their feet. "Where am I!? What happened!?"
"Yeah, dimensional travel is pretty disorienting first time around. You okay?"
"Wha-" The cubone readies their club and steps back. "Who are you?! Where is Alice?!"
Alice raises their arms. "It's me! I'm Alice!" They lunge forward and embrace the cubone. "I'm so glad you're finally here Rose!"
Rose immediately suplexes Alice, leaving them groaning on the ground.
"ugh... that's my good little barbarian..."
"Oh my god, Alice!" Rose helps Alice up. "What... What happened?! Where are we?! Why in the world are you a cubone?!"
"1, we're safe, 2, we're safe, and 3... I'm actually not sure why I'm still a cubone, but it's so cool to finally understand you!"
"What do you mean we're safe? And who is that!?" Rose points her club at Compass.
"No, Rose, you don't get it, we're SAFE. That could be literally anyone and it'd be fine. This entire world is so safe, you won't believe it. But also, that's my friend Compass."
"Uh, hi," Compass says. "So um, you're Alice's partner Rose? It's great to meet you! But uh, Alice... What actually happened?"
"Well," Alice says, "you just helped me pull off an interdimensional heist/rescue mission! Seriously, we were so screwed, your timing was perfect. So Rose! This is Compass, they were my partner while I was trapped in another world and also lost my memory. I would kill for them."
"Please don't."
"Wait," Rose says, "trapped in a... what?"
"Yeah, didn't have time to explain before, but I have so much to tell you! And Compass! I have my memory back! I have so much to tell both of you!"
"Alright, do you have a hideout here where we can talk safely?"
"Rose. Buddy. You're not getting it. There's food everywhere, the jobs pay a ton, they'll hire random people off the street, and the punishment for stealing is community service THAT THEY ALSO PAY YOU FOR! We're SAFE here!"
"SURPRISE ATTACK!!" A rattata leaps out from behind a tree, claws ready, and Rose whips around and smacks them out of the air with her club. They fall to the ground, unconscious.
"... See how easy that was!?" Alice says. "No one here is a serious threat, and most people are straight-up KIND! We don't need to survive here. We can just live."
"Um, Thorn?" Compass says. "What are you talking about?"
"Oh Compass, now that I have my memories back, I have got some SHIT to tell you. I am NEVER going back home again."
The three members of Team Rose pull on a rope, lifting a young shinx out of a hole. "Are you okay?" Compass asks once the shinx is safe.
"Yeah." Shinx breathes a sigh of relief. "Thanks."
Rose turns to Alice. "So Alice, how-"
"ALICE!?!" Shinx gasps, almost stumbling back into the hole. "Y-you mean Alice the Human?!"
Alice smiles. "In the flesh. Don't worry, I wasn't actually causing the apocalypse. And as for my various assaults, while I did definitely stab many people, I got pardoned for those after I punched god in the face."
"... You WHAT!?!"
"Thorn, stop," Compass says, "you're scaring them." Compass starts escorting Shinx back to town, while Alice and Rose trail behind.
"Alice, as I was saying," Rose says, "how much are we getting paid for this job?"
"300 coins."
"... Right. Better question, how much food could that buy?"
Alice smiles. "About 3 days worth."
"I see, that is pretty good. So split between the three of us, as long as we do a mission every day-"
"That was split between the three of us."
"... WHAT?!"
"Yup. Welcome to our new home."
Okay so maybe it's a little rushed to have the goodbye and the reunion happen in the same chapter, but at least it's pretty accurate to the source material right? Anyway, I think that ties up all the lose ends. If there's any questions you still want answered, please post them on Team Rose's Official Rescue Team Q&A!
Also, I doubt anyone noticed (because I sure didn't), but when I switched computers recently, I lost some fonts, so the thumbnails have been in a less fun-looking font for the past 7 chapters. Oops. I'll fix those soon probably.
If you enjoyed the story, please comment! I love hearing responses to my writing! What was your favorite part?
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Wooh! Heck yeah!
It is true that parts of this chapter feel a little rushed, and didn't leave as much of an emotional impact because of that, but that's completely understandable, since the story had other priorities than this scene in particular.
And even with that, the chapter was still fun to read! These last two chapters were an absolutely great way to end things off.
Overall, and I've probably made that very clear already, the entirety of Rescue Team Rose was absolutely amazing, and I've loved every second of this journey.
This story was amazing, you are amazing, and I can't wait to see what you come up with next, because I'm sure that's gonna be amazing as well.
It is true that parts of this chapter feel a little rushed, and didn't leave as much of an emotional impact because of that, but that's completely understandable, since the story had other priorities than this scene in particular.
And even with that, the chapter was still fun to read! These last two chapters were an absolutely great way to end things off.
Overall, and I've probably made that very clear already, the entirety of Rescue Team Rose was absolutely amazing, and I've loved every second of this journey.
This story was amazing, you are amazing, and I can't wait to see what you come up with next, because I'm sure that's gonna be amazing as well.
Yeah, it would've just been filler to add more stuff between them, and I was kinda running out of stamina/passion for this project anyway lol. I feel I did justice to the important parts, so I'm satisfied just wrapping things up.
I think I'm all out of PMD for a while (unless PSMD gives me inspiration when I finally play it), so I'll probably go back to PaperDemon Art RPG with Elian until I get another idea.
I think I'm all out of PMD for a while (unless PSMD gives me inspiration when I finally play it), so I'll probably go back to PaperDemon Art RPG with Elian until I get another idea.
In my opinion, this work of yours is less successful than your previous ones. Why is that? Personally, I think the idea of your work was to express the trust between the main character and his partner, but the story moves so quickly that the main character and his partner are not fully represented at the climax (Not even at the end of the story!). And the climax of the plot is too dark and unexciting (the only impression I have is a desperate guy being hunted down and cornered to fight) even covered up the qualities that the protagonist needs to show in your idea!
You also mentioned the story is too rushed, which is exactly what I think. In addition, I think it was a big mistake for you to omit the part of sky Tower, which can be said to be the biggest climax in the original work, and the subsequent plot arrangement is also to deepen gengar's role image (In comparison, your portrayal of this character is so far from the original that any Pokemon could take his place)
You also mentioned the story is too rushed, which is exactly what I think. In addition, I think it was a big mistake for you to omit the part of sky Tower, which can be said to be the biggest climax in the original work, and the subsequent plot arrangement is also to deepen gengar's role image (In comparison, your portrayal of this character is so far from the original that any Pokemon could take his place)
Bing Xin, the great writer of contemporary China, once said: "You should read more books to cultivate your own sentiment and enrich your writing materials. Secondly, if you want to write well, you should write more. Writing is hard work. Only when you write more, can you really understand it. In addition, she also believes that the composition also needs personal experience, to write out the taste, true feelings. In "Three Letters to Little Readers", she said: "Creation comes from life. Without true feelings and facts in life, what I write would not be bright and vivid. Nothing written can be moving without a truly moving situation in life." What is not experience is all guesswork and lack of real feeling. It is in writing that we are most likely to get into a dead end.
It's okay, I don't get offended easily. But you should be careful about giving criticism when it isn't asked for; sometimes people are just writing for fun, and unwanted criticism can hurt their feelings. I know I've asked for criticism in the past, but you should ask permission if the person isn't asking for criticism on their story.
I can see your point and still regret Posting those comments in second thought... I have a problem: I like to comment on things I care about, and I have quick temper and too stubborn. I don't consider other people's feelings, and I can't express my true thoughts clearly... Anyway, I think there are some flaws in the character creation of this story, and the plot is not enough. I suggest you continue with this story and write some plots from the second round of the game (such as exploring, making friends, and breaking the curse of Gradevoir with Gengar).
See? I still can't stop talking……oops
See? I still can't stop talking……oops
I agree, I don't think this story was as strong as my others. But I don't understand what you mean by the main characters being 'not fully represented'. I agree, the arc from chapters 13-19 are dark and unexciting, but it's supposed to be like that. It's not meant to be exciting, it's meant to explore the characters' thoughts and feelings about this dark situation. It's about betrayal of trust, and Compass's guilt over their actions, so I'm not worried about it being unexciting.
I agree, Sky Tower is the biggest climax of the original. But it had nothing to do with this story; I didn't have any ideas for how fighting Rayquaza and stopping a meteor would affect the main characters. If I included it, it would just waste time. I feel as though my portrayal of Gengar is accurate to the original; he's a selfish jerk who bullies the main characters, but when he remembers Gardevoir, his guilt makes him want to help.
It's okay if you didn't enjoy this story, but I think it's just a matter of personal preference.
(also, Alice uses they/them pronouns, not he/him)
I agree, Sky Tower is the biggest climax of the original. But it had nothing to do with this story; I didn't have any ideas for how fighting Rayquaza and stopping a meteor would affect the main characters. If I included it, it would just waste time. I feel as though my portrayal of Gengar is accurate to the original; he's a selfish jerk who bullies the main characters, but when he remembers Gardevoir, his guilt makes him want to help.
It's okay if you didn't enjoy this story, but I think it's just a matter of personal preference.
(also, Alice uses they/them pronouns, not he/him)
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