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KohakuIceDragon
Link to Submission: http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/...../kogietest.jpg
Submission Name: Kogie WIP
Type of Media: Digital Art
Rating: General
Type of Response wanted: Redlines, and Critiques!
Artist's Comments:
This is a request I am doing for
kogie but my anatomy is soooo messed up Dx his isn't that bad it's mine that really bothers me so any way to help make it look less.... deformed would be greatly appreciated :)
Art and Kohaku © KohakuIceDragon
Feral Kogie © kogie
All comments/help/criticism/redlines are appreciated!
KohakuIceDragonLink to Submission: http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/...../kogietest.jpg
Submission Name: Kogie WIP
Type of Media: Digital Art
Rating: General
Type of Response wanted: Redlines, and Critiques!
Artist's Comments:
This is a request I am doing for
kogie but my anatomy is soooo messed up Dx his isn't that bad it's mine that really bothers me so any way to help make it look less.... deformed would be greatly appreciated :)Art and Kohaku ©
KohakuIceDragonFeral Kogie ©
kogieAll comments/help/criticism/redlines are appreciated!
Category Artwork (Digital) / General Furry Art
Species Mammal (Other)
Size 1280 x 702px
File Size 93.2 kB
What's bothering me most is the position of the girl. It's not really... possible for a body to comfortably hold itself up like that. Try lifting yourself up and hugging or holding on to anyone or anything - you'll definitely find that you need support. It's more of a "dramatic dragging yourself across the floor" pose rather than a "snuggle up" pose.
the one on the right is okay - move the visible eye more to the left, it's looking a tad wide. :)
the one on the right is okay - move the visible eye more to the left, it's looking a tad wide. :)
LOL I noticed that as well xD That's exactly whats bothering me but I'd hate to start over again is there any advice you could give that I could use to maybe use at least part of what I have? If not I'll just have to redraw it :v Well thank you very much for the critique ^w^
~ KohakuIceDragon
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KohakuIceDragon
aw well lol thank you and I'll definitely keep that in mind when I redraw it ^^
~ KohakuIceDragon
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KohakuIceDragon
I have to agree with 
zydala The spine can't bend that way comfortably. I'm going to doodle up a better angle to possibly salvage the piece, just might take me a little bit. =)
zydala The spine can't bend that way comfortably. I'm going to doodle up a better angle to possibly salvage the piece, just might take me a little bit. =)
The girl's tail is more like a blob than a shape, and the wolf's tail seems to just jut out of his spine - try to picture the wolf's anatomy and skeleton in it's entirety and remember the wolf's tail is connected to his spine, and picture the shape of the vertebrae and how far it can bend up.
The wolf's front paws are...terrible, I'm sorry. They're really small and far too short.
I like the wolf's head though, and the girl's hand placement. I agree with zydala on the girl's pose though.
The wolf's front paws are...terrible, I'm sorry. They're really small and far too short.
I like the wolf's head though, and the girl's hand placement. I agree with
zydala on the girl's pose though.
Thank you that really makes a lot of sense ^^ and yeah his paws are horrible lol I could never seem to get them right >.< you're critique and advice is much appreciated ^^
~ KohakuIceDragon
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KohakuIceDragon 
Here you go hon, I hope this helps so you don't have to draw it all over again. =) http://i303.photobucket.com/albums/.....nes/Kogie1.png Good luck! <3
Is this a sketch or are you already doing the lineart?
Your lines in general are showing to be really weak. The form doesn't look very solid. And you like to hide behind a lot of fluff. If you don't draw out the form before adding the fluff (like hair, manes, etc) it's going to look unnatural. Hair comes from your scalp, drawing a mop of hair without even rendering that will mess it up.
http://imgur.com/SM8aN.jpg Here's a redline if it helps =)
Your lines in general are showing to be really weak. The form doesn't look very solid. And you like to hide behind a lot of fluff. If you don't draw out the form before adding the fluff (like hair, manes, etc) it's going to look unnatural. Hair comes from your scalp, drawing a mop of hair without even rendering that will mess it up.
http://imgur.com/SM8aN.jpg Here's a redline if it helps =)
This is more of a sketch and my first time using a tablet >.< and thank you soooooooo much for your help! I'll definitely stop hiding behind fluff xD because I do tend to do that a lot >.> the redline really puts what you mean by strengthening the form ^w^ all your help is greatly apprecitated <3
~ KohakuIceDragon
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KohakuIceDragon 
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