My my, the things that love incites. =/

This is quite lovely, Scier; I couldn't have done a more illustrious job myself! The first line of each quatrain is a marvelous display of anaphora; the repetition of "If" contributes a wonderfully whimsical feel. ^^

The brief poems always seem to float to the surface, and an (abab) rhyme scheme, eh? As I always say: it's difficult, but oh when one pulls it off! <3

(Of course, I'm letting the slant rhyme of "dreamt" and "crept" go. It's just too precious a work to be so critical about such things.)

The poem is captivating and oh so surreal, and with such a simple topic. *sigh* Sometimes I feel I've forgotten about the simplicity of pure emotion. I shall have to rectify that. ^^;

It would seem that the last line has a slightly different meter, BUT, it's the end of the poem and the only line to do such; therefore, I really can't say anything against it. =D

Good show, ole boy! \(^o^)/

I just could not think of a better alternative for the dreamt/crept lines. I knew they were a slant, but they fit so perfectly and there simply weren't other options which said what they say. X3

Like I've told you sir, emotion is a powerful muse. It simply has to be balance with logical development.

wonderful peice, the best poems always come from what you care about the most.

Mind if I critique? I know I never get a chance to really look deep into your poems, but I'd like to now.

Go right ahead. I'd be very pleased to hear from you. :3

It is indeed, a very good poem. But I'd like you to think about what it is you are saying more.
Will the moon portray the right feeling? Or are you leaving the interpretation up to the reader. To me it looks like the stanzas throw there meaning pretty well, but I feel it could flow better. Hard to put my mind on how but it seems like you could dive even deeper in thought.
One last thing, i get caught up on the last stanza. My mind WANTS to read "Forever" Instead of "Forevermore" there for messing up the last line.
Other then that, it is a fine peace my friend. And the reason you wrote it is a beautiful thing.

A basic theme of the poem is that of light and darkness. The moon is the primary (natural) source of light at night, and light is typically seen as a comfort. Therefore, to place the moon by her is to provide the highest (natural) comfort possible at night. The stars are placed there for the same reason, a faint comforting glow that does not actually impede sleeping.

As for the forever vs forevermore, nobody else has mentioned that. X3 It seems alright to me.

How else could it flow better though? More specifics would be helpful.

@.@ my brain isn't good at articulating what I want. So I suppose, forget what I said?

No, I appreciate the feedback. x3 It's alright if you are not certain what you dislike about it, but knowing there are issues helps me give it another look.

Of course my fellow poet.

I honestly cant find the words to reflect on this.
But I loved it.

And I am glad you did. ^^ Thank you.