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The Silent killer
It was an cold night as the police officer drived along the quiet streets where there had happened quite many terrible things....
A sigh left his lips as he turned on the cars radio to break the silent.
“What kind of killer leaves almost nothing left of it's victims? Only bits of them are found here and there, but never an wholy body is found.” he thought for himself as he stoped by at an old pub.
He looked at the pub and it's sourrondings, trying to see if ther's anything strange with it before he finnaly turns the car off and steps out.
A bit away from there in an alley, some persons looks suspicious at him as he steps inside the pub.
Inside the place is quite dark and ther's not much light in the room.
He looks around in the room a while before he finnaly sits down at the desk near the bartender.
“Anything to drink, sir?” the bartender asked as he looked at him.
The police officer lifted his head slow, looked up at the bartender and answered: “No thanks, i don't drink while working.”
The bartender noded and contiuned with his work.
“hm...I may not drink right not, but maybe you could help me with something else that i could need some help with.” The police said as he looked around in the room.
“And what might that be, sir?” The bartender asked.
“Please, call me jack. Im a bit tired of being called sir most of the time.”The police said and looked at the bartender.
The bartender noded and asked: “So Jack, what brings you here on a night like this? Are you just tired, do you need to relax or could it be because of the all the murders and the body parts from men that have been found here and there on the ground.”
The police sighed before he said: “...yes, but i have no clude who the killer might be and why there's only men that's been murdered so far and no womans.”
The bartender lowered his head and whispered something inone of the polices ear.
“A demon in a woman's skin?!” The police brust out and contiuned: “You must be kidding me! Deamons doesn't exist! And how can it be walking around in a womans skin, killing men in dark alleys?” he asked, looking suspicious at the bartender.
But the bartender only ignored what the police had said and replied by saying: “Better stay inside at night time, if you don't wanna lose you're life, Jack. Some of my best customers have lost theirs while being drunk as they starts to walk back home. Somewhere on their way home they spot an woman that they follows into the dark alleys. And after that, no one ever sees them in life again.”
It was quiet for a while as the police officer stared at the bartender, unsure if he was telling the true or not.
After a while the bartender said: “Believe me or not if u want, but it's out there, killing men.”
The police looked at the bartender a while before he got up and walked out from the pub. Just when he was about to open his car door, he notice (Edit)
Fin/To be contiuned...
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Im not one of the best writers, but because i still can't upload anything, i started to write this little story (that i still need to finnish, sadly i don't know Pinky so much). But i hope u will like it
even if it's not finnished yet, also i hope it's ok i used a little bit from this http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3789705/ pic (it's where i got the idea to this little story).
Alos i hope i can figure out what to do so i can show what art i have been shetching, i really wanna upload my own art and show what i have.
Text/Story © A.H
Pinky ©
Constructive criticism is welcomed
The Silent killer
It was an cold night as the police officer drived along the quiet streets where there had happened quite many terrible things....
A sigh left his lips as he turned on the cars radio to break the silent.
“What kind of killer leaves almost nothing left of it's victims? Only bits of them are found here and there, but never an wholy body is found.” he thought for himself as he stoped by at an old pub.
He looked at the pub and it's sourrondings, trying to see if ther's anything strange with it before he finnaly turns the car off and steps out.
A bit away from there in an alley, some persons looks suspicious at him as he steps inside the pub.
Inside the place is quite dark and ther's not much light in the room.
He looks around in the room a while before he finnaly sits down at the desk near the bartender.
“Anything to drink, sir?” the bartender asked as he looked at him.
The police officer lifted his head slow, looked up at the bartender and answered: “No thanks, i don't drink while working.”
The bartender noded and contiuned with his work.
“hm...I may not drink right not, but maybe you could help me with something else that i could need some help with.” The police said as he looked around in the room.
“And what might that be, sir?” The bartender asked.
“Please, call me jack. Im a bit tired of being called sir most of the time.”The police said and looked at the bartender.
The bartender noded and asked: “So Jack, what brings you here on a night like this? Are you just tired, do you need to relax or could it be because of the all the murders and the body parts from men that have been found here and there on the ground.”
The police sighed before he said: “...yes, but i have no clude who the killer might be and why there's only men that's been murdered so far and no womans.”
The bartender lowered his head and whispered something inone of the polices ear.
“A demon in a woman's skin?!” The police brust out and contiuned: “You must be kidding me! Deamons doesn't exist! And how can it be walking around in a womans skin, killing men in dark alleys?” he asked, looking suspicious at the bartender.
But the bartender only ignored what the police had said and replied by saying: “Better stay inside at night time, if you don't wanna lose you're life, Jack. Some of my best customers have lost theirs while being drunk as they starts to walk back home. Somewhere on their way home they spot an woman that they follows into the dark alleys. And after that, no one ever sees them in life again.”
It was quiet for a while as the police officer stared at the bartender, unsure if he was telling the true or not.
After a while the bartender said: “Believe me or not if u want, but it's out there, killing men.”
The police looked at the bartender a while before he got up and walked out from the pub. Just when he was about to open his car door, he notice (Edit)
Fin/To be contiuned...
**********
Im not one of the best writers, but because i still can't upload anything, i started to write this little story (that i still need to finnish, sadly i don't know Pinky so much). But i hope u will like it
even if it's not finnished yet, also i hope it's ok i used a little bit from this http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3789705/ pic (it's where i got the idea to this little story).Alos i hope i can figure out what to do so i can show what art i have been shetching, i really wanna upload my own art and show what i have.
Text/Story © A.H
Pinky ©
Constructive criticism is welcomed
Category Story / Miscellaneous
Species Unspecified / Any
This is so cool! I've never had a story written about one of my characters before. I'm totally on the edge of my seat about this! Giddy with excitement. But no, really, I am of the edge of my seat... I should probably sit up, this position is not good for my tailbone.
I really would like to see this story finished. I wish I was more language inclined, then I could really give you some good feedback. The only thing I can say to read over and check some of your grammar, there are a few spots here and there that need adjustment in that regard.
You can send me a note with any questions you have about Pinky.
I really would like to see this story finished. I wish I was more language inclined, then I could really give you some good feedback. The only thing I can say to read over and check some of your grammar, there are a few spots here and there that need adjustment in that regard.
You can send me a note with any questions you have about Pinky.
ohh.. mystery~ ehehehe. I'm looking forward to more~ I've never heard of someone doing a fic for fan art, so this is really cool! :D
but you need to go back and really read what you write and watch out for run ons. I think another thing is that you use speech to move things along, maybe have him drink while he reflects on things that he's found out. >D looking totally gum shoe like! >D so awesome!
but you need to go back and really read what you write and watch out for run ons. I think another thing is that you use speech to move things along, maybe have him drink while he reflects on things that he's found out. >D looking totally gum shoe like! >D so awesome!
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