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You have many good ideas, however to them practice and development to rhetoric will help them.
Description and details help convey the world of the work to the audience. The more details and description the more such a work comes to life for that audience.
You suffer the fallacy in telling not showing which disrupts flow and narrative purpose. Showing through your detail and description in action allows this flow and expression of sensory to your audience.
Now, a beginning is an important thing it needs to convey to and grasp an audiences attentions dragging them into the piece. You exploit some of the works purpose in a beginning by narrative expression which is good. Yet, leading in perhaps with a prologue narrative, some action, or even character dialogue by a narrative character may help convey this to the audience in leading them into the text.
You use many common archetypes, especially in plot and characterization. Mainly where Ryan is concerned as the main protagonist. You will need to work hard to keep these from becoming cliché. Nothing is wrong with common archetypes as long as they are applied and managed to the works purpose and kept from definite definition.
Everything you do builds towards the purpose of a work in a rhetorical triangle. Which consists of what the story you want to covey’s purpose vs. your text vs. your audience. On that is based off of three principles of ethos (ethics) vs. Pathos (emotion) vs. logos (logic).
You need to build the world to keep these in balance, in which all parts of the work are to be expressed. Names for example should be build to convey to the rhetoric.
An end is also important thing as it conveys the works purpose to an audience through climax and resolution.
Keep practicing and writing. Good luck with the rest.
Description and details help convey the world of the work to the audience. The more details and description the more such a work comes to life for that audience.
You suffer the fallacy in telling not showing which disrupts flow and narrative purpose. Showing through your detail and description in action allows this flow and expression of sensory to your audience.
Now, a beginning is an important thing it needs to convey to and grasp an audiences attentions dragging them into the piece. You exploit some of the works purpose in a beginning by narrative expression which is good. Yet, leading in perhaps with a prologue narrative, some action, or even character dialogue by a narrative character may help convey this to the audience in leading them into the text.
You use many common archetypes, especially in plot and characterization. Mainly where Ryan is concerned as the main protagonist. You will need to work hard to keep these from becoming cliché. Nothing is wrong with common archetypes as long as they are applied and managed to the works purpose and kept from definite definition.
Everything you do builds towards the purpose of a work in a rhetorical triangle. Which consists of what the story you want to covey’s purpose vs. your text vs. your audience. On that is based off of three principles of ethos (ethics) vs. Pathos (emotion) vs. logos (logic).
You need to build the world to keep these in balance, in which all parts of the work are to be expressed. Names for example should be build to convey to the rhetoric.
An end is also important thing as it conveys the works purpose to an audience through climax and resolution.
Keep practicing and writing. Good luck with the rest.
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