He looks great, but I faved more for the backstory. For what seems at first a not-uncommon soldier character, you worked in some interesting tidbits about genetic standards in the Academy - seems to bring up racism issues, as well as a jab at Kennel Clubs and their often arbitrary standards? Also, his story, while all laid out here, could be a good chunk of game story, particularly his need to feel like he's fighting the good fight. There'd be some nice action scenes of swordfighting with fire magic, I'm sure. :3

Not to be too critical, but he's a bit "big" for 6'1" and 280. That's actually a fairly realistic height/weight :P