I would love to, however, it will not open for me. Sorry. Do you have it where you can copy/paste or can be posted online?

There you go.

Thank you. I read the passage. What feedback are you looking for? Grammatical or something a bit more? Will this be a book, or is will this be an internet posting? Can you give me some direction as to where you wish to take this?

The concept and personal feel of the work is attention-getting. That opens up a lot of possibilities. Thanks for letting me read it.

You're welcome. I want help organizing my thoughts, as well as the work itself. It's amazing how poorly language arts prepares one for actual writing.

I have taught the art of writing and English as a whole. I always suggest writing like a computer memory dump. Just write, though, be cognizant of the grammar, but do not let it get in the way of the flow of ideas from the brain to the paper (or digital depending on how you enjoy writing)

Once the idea had transferred to the physical then you can go back and dissect the grammatical and flow. Losing an idea is one of the hardest things to deal with. If I can help, you know where I am at! Writing is the only thing that keeps me on this miserable rock, so I try to understand how to use it to convey what I want it to.

very well written... I 'loved' it - sorry, but I couldn't resist...

yes, society has changed so dramatically, or perhaps I was just so naive... more likely both...

V.