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Alright once again a pilot that i revised ,and fixed a lot of things I did.So please suggestions,and comments whether I should flesh it out fully ,and continue it.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Mammal (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 4.9 kB
Your revisions have paid off. A good opening pilot that opens well and has good character introductory elements. The descriptions and details strong as well. Over the next couple of parts if you choose to do more build up the character traits a bit more and it should move along fie. Best of luck with the rest.
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