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Whew, chapter one down finally. This is the story of the Chinese Manticore (Chanti) version of Kuro-Kai.
I'm greatly attached to the storyline, but would also love some literary feedback/criticisms/rants =3
DO keep in mind all of these names are actually derived from Chinese historical timelines. You can find all of them in Qin, Han, 3 kingdoms, and northern dynasty.
~Kai
I'm greatly attached to the storyline, but would also love some literary feedback/criticisms/rants =3
DO keep in mind all of these names are actually derived from Chinese historical timelines. You can find all of them in Qin, Han, 3 kingdoms, and northern dynasty.
~Kai
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 89 x 120px
File Size 17.3 kB
Very good beginning, I can’t wait to see more. Only thing I see as odd is there seems to be a time disparity between when the young emperor survives the assassination attempt and the point where he returns. Did he continue to the battle at the northern border or just hide for a month to avoid detection before returning to the castle?
jaiden
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