Only comment I can make it the DeLorean's owner is not going to be happy with people lying on the car. The metal dents from that, (source: I know a DeLorean owner)

Heh. My dad used to own one. Cool car, but poorly made with the Victor Frankenstein school of design, and not in production for long enough to get debugged. The stainless steel would probably have... interesting marks from Otto lying on it, even if there were no dents.

Ho boy, Alex might just need to be employed by them. Not to mention he may become a target... Sequel?

That was a lot of fun. Slice of life, except for the explody bit... I hope Alex takes it better than Otto did.

It's gone bloodborne!

"The only way to protect you is to make sure you get vixenated."
"You mean vaccinated?"
"No."

At first you had my curiosity.
Now you have my attention.

I'd think it would be highly unsafe to have the nanites remain active in the body even after the TF is complete, to prevent precisely this kind of thing from happening.

Realistically, yeah. We're told that the nanites are normally locked so they only work when activated in a lab, then stop. The ones in Otto have been hacked and that's useful for stealing the tech, but really dangerous. (Though non-replicating nanites might be OK for things like artery scrubbing.)

It's been suggested that if the nanites really do have the ability to TF people just by blood contact, people would find out and come to beg Otto for a transfusion. "I'm terminally ill -- I don't care if this turns me into a catgirl!" I might write exactly that happening, and it'd be a moral problem! Probably legal in Coalition territory only because it hasn't been banned yet.

Small Error: Jenny had whipped out her phone and snapped a picture. She showed it to Jenny. "We should sell posters!"

I assume Otto is the one who is being shown the picture.
Interesting that the story mentions mental changes and has shifted pronouns. Is that a nanite thing or a label theory type thing?

Fixed (along with another unnecessary use of "whipped"). Thanks!

I wasn't sure whether to call Otto "she" in this sequel. I ended up doing that because the character's obviously physically changed, but she's also not sold on the whole "female" thing. Generally I change the words based on what the character feels like, but it's not a hard and fast rule for me -- and not based on what anyone considers the Correct Way.

Ok this story series has gotten me hooked!! Can't wait for more.