Good stuff, could use a little formatting in the way of spaces between paragraphs and one-liners, but otherwise it's well-written.

Right, sorry about that. I actually wrote this on notepad (which was a very bad decision now that I think about it )

Yay, you added it. Ya only thing here is it needs to be formatted.. I don't remember if the other one or not, but it would be good to do.

Sucks to be him.

But in all seriousness, this is a great story and i'd love to see a sequel in the future.

Really... I'll definitely consider that when I'm done with my current series.

Thanks for reading

I agree, it is incredibly immoral.

No problem!

I can't give you too much reasoning for why that is, as I did write this a while back; but I think it was probably either my attempt at making it mysterious in some way, or just lazy/bad writing on my part. Most likely a combination of the two.

Thanks for the continued interest. It's not often you see someone going back to a story to leave a comment, especially this long after. I appreciate it

Good story. DTF has already explained my only criticisms. It's short and to the point, thus making it a fun little "Role-Resversal" romp. Well done!

Glad you liked it! I should probably go back and edit these old stories one of these days x3