Cool and interesting. Seems to be coming along nicely Theo =)

It's a really good story but I think you should slow it down a bit it seems to be coming on to fast. Just a bit of advice!

;) nother one

Flench was a favourite of the Dibbuns whenever he cames to visit, as was Solan. The pair always provided a source of ammusement, seeing as they were so different yet so alike. The Dibbuns often got into to quarrells over who would get to ride on who's tail. Flench and Solan were about to embark on their monthly journey to the Abbey, when Sorando approached them. "I've got something I need you two ta do on your way. You'll be escorting somebeast from Salamandastron to the Abbey. Now, I know this might take some time, so stay gone as long as ye have to. I'll look after your ma' while your gone. Be safe, and take care, my sons." he said as he clapped them both soundly on the back.

Lady Rockflash stood overlooking the ocean from the forge rooom window, just as the countless Badger Lords and Ladies before her. She was awaiting the arrival of the two travellers from the holt of Sorando to escort her daughter, Rosalin, to Redwall Abbey. Lady Rockflash had been hte ruler of Salamandastron for more seasons than anybeast cared to count, constantly keeping a vliiligant watch over her beloved Mossflower coasts. There was a sharp rap at the chamber door. "Come in, Major." Major Duckworth Wifflescut (III) was a proper decorated march hare, complete with mustachio and monocle. "Reporting at your request, m'lady!" Lady Rockflash sighed. "I know why you're here, Ducky. Take a seat. And don't you 'M'lady' me you long-eared scutbucket." "Terribly sorry about all that, marm. Just old habbit I suppose. What was it you summoned me for?" "There has been quite a[insert space here]bit of movement along the treelines, but no signs of our travellers. Do you think they could have been captured?" The Major strode over to the window. "Not hardly, marm. I know your culprits in the woods. Silly old buch of bushtails, always causing trouble for anyone who comes near their territory. But I seriously doubt they could get the jump on anyone from Sorando's holt. Tough old bucnch they are." "I miss the days of the Healer foxes in Mossflower. Always ready to lend a paw to anyone in need. my mother knew a few personally. She said that their ways were almost magical... but all that remains now is the wretched scum that inhabits the vermin populations." "Quite right, marm. My gradnfather told me stories of them when I was nought more than a leveret. Just a bunch of tricksters and theives left now." "Send for Rosalin, Major. I think I see our guests approaching on the shoreline."

=) again just trying to be helpful!!! (i could spell check it afore you upload ya no~)

You DO have alot of spelling errors.


Can you be more descriptive of where the characters currently are in the story?

For example, where's this town, where's the otter's cave, what species is everyone, ETC. I like it, I just need some clarification