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So... I'm not really sure what brought this on, but I really wanted to write a quick piece about this. So I did. I want to say ahead of time that I am not actually spiritual in the sense that this story implies; I'm Wiccan, not a Christian. Anyways. So, here's an abstract view on the decision of an angel (one particular angel that we're all quite familiar with, what with all the stories circulating around him) to become the guardian of the mortal world.
I'd like to point out that this is a quick piece, and not an all out story attempt. Plus, trying to write in a formal-ish air that seems to be associated with the winged ones is really kinda difficult. Hopefully this story doesn't seem... superfluous.
Enjoy! Critiquing is welcome, compliments are fine, and if you're looking to put it down without saying anything useful, just keep on moving because this isn't the submission for you.
I'd like to point out that this is a quick piece, and not an all out story attempt. Plus, trying to write in a formal-ish air that seems to be associated with the winged ones is really kinda difficult. Hopefully this story doesn't seem... superfluous.
Enjoy! Critiquing is welcome, compliments are fine, and if you're looking to put it down without saying anything useful, just keep on moving because this isn't the submission for you.
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File Size 6.9 kB
You expressed your works purpose well. Fiction is fiction, yet on forms of higher concepts it is hard to adjust for your rhetorical triangle. Especially when higher concepts are considered in a short piece. It is written world, however, because of the concepts of religion, faith, life, death, gods, creationism, afterlife, and the kaboot of existence, it creates a great deal of holes in the work.
However, as again, you have attained the works purpose and it is understandable. You were not trying to write a larger piece with this, so despite these holes they do not account to the piece itself.
However, as again, you have attained the works purpose and it is understandable. You were not trying to write a larger piece with this, so despite these holes they do not account to the piece itself.
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