hehehe... well... although ya got some good material here Mr. IM, I think what it lacks is that certain... emphasized feelin'a somebody who's REALLY pissed off about the situation yer rantin' about... I'm a big fan'a 2 m'self so I know how ya feel about'im... an although I'd love ta rant about all the things that've pissed me off/continue ta piss me off... I realized that it'd take me quite a bit ta work m'self up ta the kind'a fervor that'd really make my rants the kind that'd grab someone's attention...

...but I think ya'd definately got potential... if ya can start ta really show in yer voice jus' how angry the given topic makes ya feel... this one sounded more like ya was jus' slightly annoyed at the fact that there're so many dumbasses...

Hope m'bein' helpful in some way... but if ya do take it the wrong way an it inspires ya ta grab the mic an yell about how pissed off ya feel about it then I'll REALLY feel like it helped, heh ;)

See, this is why I'm an author, and not a stand-up comedian.

an a good one ya are too... :)