Like this so far. I think it's well written, and it makes me want to see how it turns out. However, the whole random-guys-killing-the-protagonists-entire-town-and-family-for-no-goddam-reason thing seems a bit cliche; I know it will probably be explained later, but seriously, I've seen this used a lot. And wouldn't it make more sense if these guys were to just make the slaughter quick, clean, get it over with and go home to watch TV rather than to be sadistic, as how the leader said to, "make the dragon watch as we kill the others and throw them off the cliff,"? I dunno. It accomplishes it's effect and is sad alright, but...I dunno.

Regardless, I'll look at the following chapters to see how this turns out. And yes, I know I'm really not the person who should be critisizing other's writing.

Thanks for the compliment. And trust me, these guys are real dicks, they desperately need to die in the worst manner possible... that's all I'll say for now.

How'd you link the stories like that?!

~GR

???

On the bottem, it says "Previous" and "Next." How'd you do that?!

~GR

Ah! Oh, um, in the description, you just write [-URL=ww-w.furaffinity.ne-t/view/00000]<<Next[/-URL] (after removing every - and replacing 00000 with the submisssion number of the next chapter). Then do the same thing for Previous>> using the URL of the previous chapter.

Ugh, might be a bit late to do that now with my stuff.

~GR

Yeah, the more Chapters you have, the more annoying it is.