Wow, I'm guessing this is free write. It sort of scares me a bit. It's a very mature sort of poem. Did you ever end up addicted to meth or did you just use it in the poem? All in all it's kincof cool. I don't really know how to critique it, except that I don't understand why you keep shifting the lines from left suddenly to right.

Read down the seperated lines.

And no, I was never addicted to meth. But I'm trying to show how horrid it is.

it is. There are some creepy anti-meth commercials that I've seen out here in Idaho. Seriously, makes you never want to touch the stuff. *shivers*

and I know for a fact innocence isn't just a notion. It's real.

It is just a notion. Everyone is guilty from the moment they're born. We are creatures of sin.

That is a teaching of the catholic church. I believe that at birth all children are innocent. After all, they need to learn how to behave over time don't they? As children they can't even walk. Everything is given to them. It takes time for them to learn right from wrong. So how could you say that a child so young could be a guilty person doomed to an eternity of torment in hell? What about the babies that die in childbirth huh?

sorry if it sounds like I'm bashing. I just have a very strong feeling about innocence and little children.

I know... sorry.

no ... I'm sorry. LIke I said, I'm a firm believer in innocence. But the way I typed it sounded like I was yelling at you or accusing you. I wasn't. I really am sorry about that. Still, that was a pretty dark poem. I didn't know you had it in you to write so deeply.

Because being addicted to meth isn't so different than being addicted to what I told you about, in my mind.

ah. true, hormones are like a natural drug. It takes a lot of will power to beat them. But that's one reason why we're here on earth, to learn to control ourselves. Don't worry Russet, Foxx and I will help you as much as we can.

I know. And you have no idea how much I'll thank you for that.

Don't thank me, thank God alright? Well, maybe thank me a liiiiiiitle bit. LOL! But yeah, I can understand your pain at least a small amount. I've been dealing with masturbation and adult furry art addiction for quite some time now. And I've made great progress. I'm sure you will too.