So this story follows little Jimmy, an awkward meek introvert of a kid who is forced to endure endless bullying at his Junior High school. He talked to his parents about it, and they talked to teachers about it, and it stops for a bit, but then it starts again with the intent of "catching up".
Anyways, one day they had gone ahead and pushed him to the ground, knocking him right out, and leaving him in the back all forgotten and exposed to the elements. Then something happens that may or may not have involved Butters, and after a lengthy and very descriptive turn of events, he comes to and discovers to his shock and horror that his entire body had been transformed into that of a raichu (plus or minus some proportion structure).
... so then what?
Bet you're thinking he gets some revenge, aren't you? Bet you think that he's now got face tazers and is able to properly command respect and get back at those bullies for all the bad stuff they did to him. Right?
Sure, that could happen. After all, I'm leaving it to the imagination. I stopped the story after the TF. Anything could happen. He could remain that shy introvert and it'd just be one more thing the bullies can make fun of. Or he is quarantined because it's thought to be some kind of Poke disease and has to spend the rest of the year in a prison-like lab. Or he runs away and starts a whole new life out in the wild. Or maybe someone comes along, things he's a Pokemon, beans him with a metal orb, and now he's soneone else's problem. Or, maybe he just does nothing and stays hidden and shuddering until he passes out from malnutrition.
This is one of my pet peeves in a transformation story. I've said it in my description that I prefer to read TF stories where the transformation IS the story. I don't care much about the transformation itself; heck, often times it's not even necessary because nothing really comes out of it. Give it a try; read a story and imagine the character never actually transforms, and see if it can play out the same way.
I'm not saying that any of the TF stories on here suck or anything. I'm just hoping to nudge writers to "keep going". Flush out the idea more. Yeah, the guy is now a werewolf; what happens next? If the writer isn't interested in their own story, how can we the audience possibly be?
... also, for the record, the kid never gets revenge on the bullies. He just runs straight home, his parents phone it in, a doctor comes over and determines that it's simply the work of an Odytt (Butters was too busy adding drapes to a nearby sewer), who found him laying unconscious outside in the cold and changed him into a fur-coated raichu to help save his life. He gets home quarantined and home schooled as a result so he doesn't have to contend with "staring", which perfectly suits his introvert lifestyle. A happy ending; nobody gets hurt and things eventually achieve a new normal.
He also grows up to be a dentist.
Anyways, one day they had gone ahead and pushed him to the ground, knocking him right out, and leaving him in the back all forgotten and exposed to the elements. Then something happens that may or may not have involved Butters, and after a lengthy and very descriptive turn of events, he comes to and discovers to his shock and horror that his entire body had been transformed into that of a raichu (plus or minus some proportion structure).
... so then what?
Bet you're thinking he gets some revenge, aren't you? Bet you think that he's now got face tazers and is able to properly command respect and get back at those bullies for all the bad stuff they did to him. Right?
Sure, that could happen. After all, I'm leaving it to the imagination. I stopped the story after the TF. Anything could happen. He could remain that shy introvert and it'd just be one more thing the bullies can make fun of. Or he is quarantined because it's thought to be some kind of Poke disease and has to spend the rest of the year in a prison-like lab. Or he runs away and starts a whole new life out in the wild. Or maybe someone comes along, things he's a Pokemon, beans him with a metal orb, and now he's soneone else's problem. Or, maybe he just does nothing and stays hidden and shuddering until he passes out from malnutrition.
This is one of my pet peeves in a transformation story. I've said it in my description that I prefer to read TF stories where the transformation IS the story. I don't care much about the transformation itself; heck, often times it's not even necessary because nothing really comes out of it. Give it a try; read a story and imagine the character never actually transforms, and see if it can play out the same way.
I'm not saying that any of the TF stories on here suck or anything. I'm just hoping to nudge writers to "keep going". Flush out the idea more. Yeah, the guy is now a werewolf; what happens next? If the writer isn't interested in their own story, how can we the audience possibly be?
... also, for the record, the kid never gets revenge on the bullies. He just runs straight home, his parents phone it in, a doctor comes over and determines that it's simply the work of an Odytt (Butters was too busy adding drapes to a nearby sewer), who found him laying unconscious outside in the cold and changed him into a fur-coated raichu to help save his life. He gets home quarantined and home schooled as a result so he doesn't have to contend with "staring", which perfectly suits his introvert lifestyle. A happy ending; nobody gets hurt and things eventually achieve a new normal.
He also grows up to be a dentist.
Category Artwork (Digital) / Transformation
Species Pokemon
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... who's Donny again?
Just kidding. Honestly, I haven't really touched it since. Ch. 12 has been kinda half done for a while, but I was so busy with things like animations and the comics that got so many more interested parties that I didn't really get to continuing it.
If a lot of folks want me to continue it, though, I can.
Just kidding. Honestly, I haven't really touched it since. Ch. 12 has been kinda half done for a while, but I was so busy with things like animations and the comics that got so many more interested parties that I didn't really get to continuing it.
If a lot of folks want me to continue it, though, I can.
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