11 pages isn't that long...for part of a novel at least :P

Hey, you never know with some furs. They find 20 long lol. But take a read, give me your honest reply. Rather if its harsh or good. I dont mind either

I'm going to download this and read it. I love long novels :3

Go for it <3

psh, not long at all. it's a little too early in the novel for me to comment on the concept...but i so far like this mysterious cheshire cat. i think only 1 typo, easily find-able/fixable with a spellcheck. i found it extremely interesting how you had him running from a dog and having this affiliation with the cat...and also (unrelated) how at the beginning the soldier is really really upset at the prospect of dying in his sleep. interesting thing to be afraid of/hate the idea of, very much in it for the glory and for proving self-worth i suppose. also interesting how the kid, who i assumed to be the soldier's son, hero-worshiped his father for being so brave but is running from a doggy.
It's not absolutely fantastic writing (who really has fantastic writing anyways), but you're good, and i find that scifi/fantasy is better when the words aren't distracting you from the author's ideas....write more now. i wanna find out what this kitty's doing.

hope i gave some helpful feedback :3

This is just an exert from my novel. Its almost done as we speak. Just revising it now and getting it ready to be published. Also Prologues sometimes seem unrelated, yet they do foreshadow things lol. Though Thank you for your comments, and will get better with my writing style.

when you publish it, do tell...i'm always up for new fanboy stalking opportunities

IF I can I will do just that.

think positively D:

Silly XD Its best to realize whats going to happen. Even most of the experts tell you "EXPECT REJECTIONS!" even Lord of the Rings got the boot more than 11 times