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A messy room, a sore result [REQ]
by John-Maxwell
Conflicted author
6 years ago
A request for a buddy on discord, who asked for a story of his character Lian the half elf and his younger brother Chief.
Not much to say on this, this was the first request to get myself back into writing, and I am hoping to finally come back into it fully, just wanted to do a bit of practice before finishing anything else! Thanks for waiting
Characters:
Lian: Foxyboy123(?)
Chief: MischiefRiolu on DA
Not much to say on this, this was the first request to get myself back into writing, and I am hoping to finally come back into it fully, just wanted to do a bit of practice before finishing anything else! Thanks for waiting
Characters:
Lian: Foxyboy123(?)
Chief: MischiefRiolu on DA
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I think it would work better with "super effective" than "critical hit". I haven't played the last several Pokemon games, but in the older games, there were moves that were only super effective against some types of Pokemon. I don't know of any that only did critical hits against some Pokemon.
as for paragraph breaks, I can agree with that, this was kind of just a way to get back into writing after taking a fairly long break so I am trying to get back into the groove of making it presentable