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Apologies for not doing a lot!
I've been working in a part-time job for quite some time and, while also suffering from insomnia, I have decided to write this short poem about a godly macro's perspective with a hint of darkness/corruption in their hearts.
It's very short, I know, but I hope you enjoy it. I hope to get back to writing soon.
I promise I'll get better ;w; I'm always open for critique too, so feel free to send me a note or post a comment about your thoughts of it and my other stories if you want to.
I've been working in a part-time job for quite some time and, while also suffering from insomnia, I have decided to write this short poem about a godly macro's perspective with a hint of darkness/corruption in their hearts.
It's very short, I know, but I hope you enjoy it. I hope to get back to writing soon.
I promise I'll get better ;w; I'm always open for critique too, so feel free to send me a note or post a comment about your thoughts of it and my other stories if you want to.
Category Poetry / Macro / Micro
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File Size 12.7 kB
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Hey, this is a pretty rad poem! The fantasy of being above the world's problems is especially good right now too.
If I could give a critique, I would say that the rhythm of the poem was inconsistent to me. Because it's free verse, lines have various amounts of syllables, which makes the rhythm vary between lines and stanzas. I'd encourage you to try and make a consistent rhythm next time and see how that goes.
Nice job on this. Have a great day! ^u^
If I could give a critique, I would say that the rhythm of the poem was inconsistent to me. Because it's free verse, lines have various amounts of syllables, which makes the rhythm vary between lines and stanzas. I'd encourage you to try and make a consistent rhythm next time and see how that goes.
Nice job on this. Have a great day! ^u^
Sure, I can definitely give this one a shot!
I'm not entirely great with rhymes and keeping a narrative poem with a beat, but I can surely try.
I'll keep it in the macro way of things too to make it more fun :3
Thanks for the advice and I'm glad you like! ^^ You have a good day too
I'm not entirely great with rhymes and keeping a narrative poem with a beat, but I can surely try.
I'll keep it in the macro way of things too to make it more fun :3
Thanks for the advice and I'm glad you like! ^^ You have a good day too
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