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This one was done a while ago, chapter 5 is near completion as well. this was stuck in editing, but do not berate my editor, she has a life with things she must tend to as well. I am a bit excited about this chapter, as this is where I feel the true story really begins in Agrok's life and the lives of those around her. Some violence, Titanian political junk, and suggestive themes do exist, you have been warned.
Ps. Feed back helps me grow as a writer, if you like this, please tell me what you like, if you hate it, please tell me what was wrong (in a constructive manner please), I do listen and I do shape and grow.
Ps. Feed back helps me grow as a writer, if you like this, please tell me what you like, if you hate it, please tell me what was wrong (in a constructive manner please), I do listen and I do shape and grow.
Category Story / Fantasy
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Size 117 x 120px
File Size 232.9 kB
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Took me a while to get around to reading this, but I'm glad I finally did. The story here is shaping up to be quite interesting. I did find it to be a little difficult at times to keep track of who was saying what and some things moved perhaps a bit too fast. Still, I'm liking the story. I look forward to the next chapter.
Yeah, I'm toying with the dialogue and working on identifying people without constantly repeating thier names, and I tried cutting a bit more of the idle chitchat that wasn't very relevant to the plot. This is the very reason I ask for feedback, to know how things are working through others eyes. It will ALWAYS not look or feel good enough to my eyes, we are our own worst critics after all.
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