Well well, very interesting so far. You seem to enjoy more..."creative" breeds of animal than I do, I'll have to keep that in mind. The setting and the characters sound interesting so far; I have now switched from patiently waiting for the next chapter to impatiently waiting for the next chapter. Oh well, I guess that's good enough motivation for me to get started on chapter 2.

speaking of the number 2 and really bad transitions, I have 2 deltas (constructive criticisms) for this one.

delta the first: This chapter is densely packed with information. It's good for exposition and to get the story rolling, but I try to support the maxim of "show don't tell". While we do learn about the characters, nothing really *happens* in this chapter...but I'm sure this'll change soon...

delta the second: There are a lot of characters. While having more characters helps them flesh each other out more because there's more interaction to be had and offers a more diverse range of inflations to happen, if we're being directly told their names and personalities one after another, they get kind of hard to keep track of. And if the ending is any indication, there's more coming! Now, I will say that it could be because this is just an introduction and once the story gets going and the characters have talked to each other and done stuff that they'll get easier to keep track of. I say this because I also had this problem with firefly but I got over it after a couple of episodes. Just be sure to focus a lot on characters interacting with one another, or how different characters tackle the same problem.

I tried to keep the criticism constructive and don't let it discourage you! This is great so far and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!

Groovy! And as to the second delta, you're preaching to the choir where character interactions are concerned ^_^

Worry ye' not, for I'm sure the tale will not disappoint!

Chapter two will come as soon as I complete the massive documentary module for my radio school.

I'm not even gonna ask what that is, but it sounds painful.

Not painful, but fun! Though... it is indeed a massive undertaking. A two hour long documentary on Mt. St. Helens complete with musical score and sound effects ^_^;