Predator's Poems
I submitted these a some time ago but they hardly got any views, so resub.
Category Poetry / General Furry Art
Species Tiger
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 3.5 kB
Yeah writing poetry is what i do and even though i feel that some of the things i write are worth more than they get you just really got to make due. Although because you do more than write i am actually surprised that this was subbed 3 hrs ago and only has 4 views. Im sorry but yeah no one really reads poetry here. If you want a good place to put your poems give me a shout. At lease there people have a higher chance of reading what you write.
On the topic of the actual poem
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I know you think you know me
as this tiger I appear
but looks can be deceiving when courage turns to fear
Though I'm young and sweet
I've had enough
Through battle's call
my life's been rough
Pain and sorrow I have felt
Bruises and rips over my damaged pelt
Wothless, meaningless is how I feel
The calm of the night my only appeal
I really like this one. I personally think its the best of them all. The others are good but i feel that some better punctuation would help.
Sorry for giving you a wall of text so a summary is:
No one on FA reads poetry... like ever so dont feel bad if your poems dont get many views ( just look at me lol )
On the topic of the actual poem
Untitled
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I know you think you know me
as this tiger I appear
but looks can be deceiving when courage turns to fear
Though I'm young and sweet
I've had enough
Through battle's call
my life's been rough
Pain and sorrow I have felt
Bruises and rips over my damaged pelt
Wothless, meaningless is how I feel
The calm of the night my only appeal
I really like this one. I personally think its the best of them all. The others are good but i feel that some better punctuation would help.
Sorry for giving you a wall of text so a summary is:
No one on FA reads poetry... like ever so dont feel bad if your poems dont get many views ( just look at me lol )
I really enjoyed "The Pointless War", especially that last line. It's all pretty good, but I'd recommend breaking away from the rhyme scheme a little. To me, poetry is a little more pure when you're not worried about how each line sounds, but my tastes are a little weird. :P You've definitely got some good stuff, so it would be interesting to see you experiment with different rhyme schemes (or lack thereof).
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