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May the Kaijune goodness begin!
While the plane stopped on its runway, the Camo Squadron kept watching the live feed.
They saw as the ceremony turned into an impromptu, informal banquet. Tables had been hapharzadly arranged a bit everywhere, and were covered with food and drinks.
Everyone around the tables was chatting around the food, in a good mood.
And towering over them, the giant rooster was sitting in the middle of the square, wolfing down on some stocks of food.
Offick noticed with surprise (and a bit of worry) that he ate meat and fish as much as vegetables.
At least, there's no chicken in the lot... he thought.
He thought to try a first contact right during these festivities, but gave up on it. To kill the mood like that wouldn't be the best first contact.
So he and his men went in contact with the army platoon who was still in situation, a bit aside from the banquet (though some soldiers did join in) but more relaxed.
They did ask them if there was something they found out or suspected something fishy, but the answers were negative.
All they could do now was wait for the banquet to end.
After a few hours, the banquet finally winded down, and the rooster got up and began walking in Boise.
"What is he doing?" muttered a soldier as they saw that the kaiju was wandering aimlessly in the town, but making sure to not step on something.
"I think he's just going for a digestive walk," hazarded another.
Of course, that was the moment the titan chose to let out a mighty belch.
"Heh, looks like I got it right."
"Okay, enough rambling," grumbled the colonel. "He's relatively alone and in a good mood, now's the moment to engage contact."
A few minutes later, the Camo soldiers were on the roofs neighboring the gargantuan bird, and Offick was using a loudspeaker to talk to the giant. After some quick introductions and banalities to put him in confidence, the colonel began asking his gargantuan interlocutor the big questions: what turned him in this, who did this, etc...
It didn't really go well. Not that the kaiju seemed unable to understand the questions or reticent to answer, but he seemed incapable of speaking.
Carl, exasperated, tried to think about an alternative, when he saw two huge masses converge on him.
He barely had the time to realize it was the feathered colossus' fingers before they clamped softly but firmly on him and lifted him.
The Camo soldiers immediately took out their guns. They didn't directly aim at the giant, because he didn't seem threatening, but were ready to act if necessary.
Offick, him, now knew what an ant felt when held by a human, and held as still as possible, not out of fear (although he did feel some) but out of wariness.
As for the kaiju, he looked a few seconds at his catch with an expression both amused and amazed on his beak, before turning around and walking away from town with it.
Art by
buckdasystem
Color by
croconut
Colored original here: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/55026750/
Chet and Offick © me
While the plane stopped on its runway, the Camo Squadron kept watching the live feed.
They saw as the ceremony turned into an impromptu, informal banquet. Tables had been hapharzadly arranged a bit everywhere, and were covered with food and drinks.
Everyone around the tables was chatting around the food, in a good mood.
And towering over them, the giant rooster was sitting in the middle of the square, wolfing down on some stocks of food.
Offick noticed with surprise (and a bit of worry) that he ate meat and fish as much as vegetables.
At least, there's no chicken in the lot... he thought.
He thought to try a first contact right during these festivities, but gave up on it. To kill the mood like that wouldn't be the best first contact.
So he and his men went in contact with the army platoon who was still in situation, a bit aside from the banquet (though some soldiers did join in) but more relaxed.
They did ask them if there was something they found out or suspected something fishy, but the answers were negative.
All they could do now was wait for the banquet to end.
After a few hours, the banquet finally winded down, and the rooster got up and began walking in Boise.
"What is he doing?" muttered a soldier as they saw that the kaiju was wandering aimlessly in the town, but making sure to not step on something.
"I think he's just going for a digestive walk," hazarded another.
Of course, that was the moment the titan chose to let out a mighty belch.
"Heh, looks like I got it right."
"Okay, enough rambling," grumbled the colonel. "He's relatively alone and in a good mood, now's the moment to engage contact."
A few minutes later, the Camo soldiers were on the roofs neighboring the gargantuan bird, and Offick was using a loudspeaker to talk to the giant. After some quick introductions and banalities to put him in confidence, the colonel began asking his gargantuan interlocutor the big questions: what turned him in this, who did this, etc...
It didn't really go well. Not that the kaiju seemed unable to understand the questions or reticent to answer, but he seemed incapable of speaking.
Carl, exasperated, tried to think about an alternative, when he saw two huge masses converge on him.
He barely had the time to realize it was the feathered colossus' fingers before they clamped softly but firmly on him and lifted him.
The Camo soldiers immediately took out their guns. They didn't directly aim at the giant, because he didn't seem threatening, but were ready to act if necessary.
Offick, him, now knew what an ant felt when held by a human, and held as still as possible, not out of fear (although he did feel some) but out of wariness.
As for the kaiju, he looked a few seconds at his catch with an expression both amused and amazed on his beak, before turning around and walking away from town with it.
Art by
buckdasystemColor by
croconutColored original here: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/55026750/
Chet and Offick © me
Category Artwork (Digital) / Macro / Micro
Species Kaiju / Giant Monster
Size 1400 x 1400px
File Size 1.56 MB
Listed in Folders
Hey there! As I promised, I'm back for another review of one of your works, and with a shorter gap between the two reviews to boot! Still, apologies for the delay, life has gotten in the way as it usually does. However, I am here now, and I am more than ready to begin my review of 'First contact' for Kaiju Rising, so without further ado, let's jump in!
We begin right where 'Thanks!' left off, following Camo Squadron as they touch down in Boise, still intently watching the live coverage of the celebration as it transitions from a thrown together quasi-award ceremony to an impromptu food festival where, amongst the many people happily conversing amongst themselves, stands the giant rooster Chet, towering above not just the people at his feet, but the buildings around the square too. It's here that Offick catches a glimpse into the rooster's diet, noting that he's apparently shifted from an herbivorous diet to an omnivorous diet, prompting intrigue and a modicum of concern from the colonel. Fortunately, the rest of the celebration continues on without incident, until it begins to wind down, whereupon Chet takes his leave. However, Camo Squadron notes that he seems to have no particular destination in mind, instead simply wandering the streets of Boise, letting his meal go down.
This presents an ideal opportunity to establish communications, and there's no way Camo Squadron are going to pass this up! Fortunately, establishing communications goes smoothly! Unfortunately, the actual communications are much more difficult due to the revelation that, despite the dramatic changes that they've undergone, the ability to speak is not something they've developed. However, as Offick tries to formulate a solution to this obstacle, Chet seems to be struck with inspiration. Before Offick, or anyone for that matter, can react, he's seized between two of the titanic avian's feathered fingers! As he's held aloft and Camo Squadron watches on, Chet walks off with the tiny human still in his grasp. Where is he going? That'll be revealed in the next chapter!
Now, I do have some small suggestions and some things I just want to compliment, so let's get started on them! First up, we have the celebration itself! The progression of the initial speech to almost a party works surprisingly well, it makes sense that there would be food available, local companies, fast food trucks, and other such establishments would no doubt turn up for something as momentous, and more importantly, well-attended! Speaking of food, the note that Chet thankfully isn't eating chicken is a nice bit of comedy that does make sense when you think about it! You wouldn't want to risk angering the rooster who outsizes apartment buildings, would you?
Camo Squadron's movements and positions aren't terribly clear during the length of time that's passed since they touched down, I have to say. Logically, they'll have moved out, surely, but it does sort of make it seem as though they're still on the plane when they're watching for most of the time. Perhaps a quick mention of setting up command posts or something like that, that would resolve that. Plus, it's a nice opportunity to show how they would react to something like this! Having said that though, it's not as if it's a deal-breaker, just something I picked up on that I thought I should raise.
Apart from that, well, honestly, there really is nothing else that could need improving! There are a couple of tiny grammar quibbles. The line 'Tables had been hapharzadly disposed a bit everywhere' doesn't quite make sense, since disposed suggests that they've been thrown away. I think you mean deposited? And there was when Offick was being held by Chet where I think the use of 'by' would make more sense if it were 'out of', such as 'not out of fear (although he did feel some).' As I said though, apart from that, this is a great chapter! It's well-written and of great significance to the plot to boot! You should be proud of yourself!
I'll see you for the next review, but until then, take care and stay safe!
We begin right where 'Thanks!' left off, following Camo Squadron as they touch down in Boise, still intently watching the live coverage of the celebration as it transitions from a thrown together quasi-award ceremony to an impromptu food festival where, amongst the many people happily conversing amongst themselves, stands the giant rooster Chet, towering above not just the people at his feet, but the buildings around the square too. It's here that Offick catches a glimpse into the rooster's diet, noting that he's apparently shifted from an herbivorous diet to an omnivorous diet, prompting intrigue and a modicum of concern from the colonel. Fortunately, the rest of the celebration continues on without incident, until it begins to wind down, whereupon Chet takes his leave. However, Camo Squadron notes that he seems to have no particular destination in mind, instead simply wandering the streets of Boise, letting his meal go down.
This presents an ideal opportunity to establish communications, and there's no way Camo Squadron are going to pass this up! Fortunately, establishing communications goes smoothly! Unfortunately, the actual communications are much more difficult due to the revelation that, despite the dramatic changes that they've undergone, the ability to speak is not something they've developed. However, as Offick tries to formulate a solution to this obstacle, Chet seems to be struck with inspiration. Before Offick, or anyone for that matter, can react, he's seized between two of the titanic avian's feathered fingers! As he's held aloft and Camo Squadron watches on, Chet walks off with the tiny human still in his grasp. Where is he going? That'll be revealed in the next chapter!
Now, I do have some small suggestions and some things I just want to compliment, so let's get started on them! First up, we have the celebration itself! The progression of the initial speech to almost a party works surprisingly well, it makes sense that there would be food available, local companies, fast food trucks, and other such establishments would no doubt turn up for something as momentous, and more importantly, well-attended! Speaking of food, the note that Chet thankfully isn't eating chicken is a nice bit of comedy that does make sense when you think about it! You wouldn't want to risk angering the rooster who outsizes apartment buildings, would you?
Camo Squadron's movements and positions aren't terribly clear during the length of time that's passed since they touched down, I have to say. Logically, they'll have moved out, surely, but it does sort of make it seem as though they're still on the plane when they're watching for most of the time. Perhaps a quick mention of setting up command posts or something like that, that would resolve that. Plus, it's a nice opportunity to show how they would react to something like this! Having said that though, it's not as if it's a deal-breaker, just something I picked up on that I thought I should raise.
Apart from that, well, honestly, there really is nothing else that could need improving! There are a couple of tiny grammar quibbles. The line 'Tables had been hapharzadly disposed a bit everywhere' doesn't quite make sense, since disposed suggests that they've been thrown away. I think you mean deposited? And there was when Offick was being held by Chet where I think the use of 'by' would make more sense if it were 'out of', such as 'not out of fear (although he did feel some).' As I said though, apart from that, this is a great chapter! It's well-written and of great significance to the plot to boot! You should be proud of yourself!
I'll see you for the next review, but until then, take care and stay safe!
Hi! ^^
"Speaking of food, the note that Chet thankfully isn't eating chicken is a nice bit of comedy that does make sense when you think about it! You wouldn't want to risk angering the rooster who outsizes apartment buildings, would you?"
Well it does seem obvious
Although maybe someday, he'll eat some chicken by accident or morbid curiosity...
Added a few lines and rectified the mistakes
Thanks for the kind words ^^
"Speaking of food, the note that Chet thankfully isn't eating chicken is a nice bit of comedy that does make sense when you think about it! You wouldn't want to risk angering the rooster who outsizes apartment buildings, would you?"
Well it does seem obvious
Although maybe someday, he'll eat some chicken by accident or morbid curiosity...
Added a few lines and rectified the mistakes
Thanks for the kind words ^^
Ha ha, hey there!
Yes, it is obvious, but still, it's a nice touch and a good bit of comedy. I have to say though, that's a pretty morbid turn from you, wasn't expecting that, ha ha!
Yeah, those changes are small, but they add a lot! Nice work dude!
It's no problem man, I'll catch you in the next one!
Yes, it is obvious, but still, it's a nice touch and a good bit of comedy. I have to say though, that's a pretty morbid turn from you, wasn't expecting that, ha ha!
Yeah, those changes are small, but they add a lot! Nice work dude!
It's no problem man, I'll catch you in the next one!
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