Has some potential and seems to be an interesting world. Take your time and flesh out characterization depth.

uhh.....Rate? I will if you want me to.

it seems like something id love to read, but i cant open rtf (Damn phone). could u maybe note it to me (copy pasta) and i will give you a review to rival world renown critics!

you have a good idea and great plot. i also like how the ending leaves open a possibility for sequels. problems i can see is that there are a few spelling mistakes and quite noticible grammar errors aswell. also, the story could flow smoother. i suggest a proof read or asking someone to help with editing. overall, i enjoyed it and would love to read more of your stories.

I always expect grammer errors. If i could write a perfect story i would brag about it, but i can not. as for some one to proof read my work would you like to do that?

id be honoured :D

wow. THis is some amazing work. I can't wait to see chapter two. It really does have some great potential. I do hope that the dragon can save this poor young man though, whatever problem may be going on with him. Though I have the sneaking suspicion that the spirit of an evil black dragon is seeking to take control of him, or perhaps, the sphere was designed to change the human who was in fact meant to be a dragon. I don't know, but I can't wait to find out.