Ahhhh......lovely!

Wow

That was a really sweet story. I don't usually read people's fiction, but the story grabbed me, and I really found myself liking it.

:] <3 Go, sir.

Thanks so much! I'm really flattered and I'm glad that you liked it!

Oh, you're welcome. It was really sweet, and it kept pulling me in these little surprise directions.

of course, I was rooting they'd stay together at the end, platonic or otherwise, and was pleased. ºuº <3

[and I laughed till I coughed at the fact the USB stick was in Wilder's back pocket the whole time]

I really liked this Rikoshi, it was a sweet story. Always kept me guessing and wanting to hurry and read so I could get to the end. The "wishing" was a great catch for the reader, to snag and want to keep reading. Though, I have to say.......that'd be ONE....DEAD.....FOX, I'd have FLIPPED OUT! if something like that happened to me.

I enjoyed this greatly, I would hope to see the characters again, especially the fox.

You finally wrote a story for me. How kind of you~ ;)

The world needs more non-twinky foxes. :)

man it's so cute! It really is good... GREAT JOB! MAKE MORE STORIES LIKE THIS!

Awwr. That was really touching. Wilder's too cute! = D

Great read, thanks for making my day~! = D

Wow. That was a truly amazing story. It's rare that you find a story so enthralling. You left it off at the perfect spot, enticing my imagination to wander and create possibilities of it's own. I find myself wanting to ask if there's going to be more to it, but it's kind of perfect the way it is. I find that while I'd like more for the story's universe written, I find myself wanting this particular story line left where it is for fear of losing it's perfection.

For what it's worth, my writing philosophy is that short stories rarely (if ever) warrant having sequels, so you can rest assured that this story will stand as-is. :)

Thanks, also, for the very kind words. I'm glad that you liked the story so much!

That was incredibly sweet.

That was quite awesome. I'm glad I randomly stumbled upon it.

Wow, very nice :) It was very sweet and I loved the playfulness of Wilder throughout the whole thing.

i agree with short stories staying as-is. Because most of the time when a sequel is made..it generally most often does not capture the magic essence the original did. c:

Awww.

I owe you a huge thank you. Your story was so funny, and adorable, and magical that it fixed this morning, last night, the past several days, and probably the rest of the week (maybe even more). I started reading it and I just couldn't help but feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you so much for such a lovely compliment!

I was having kind of a downer of a day, and seeing this helped bring me right back around. Thanks for taking the time to comment on my story (and I'm glad to hear that you liked it so much!).

You're very much welcome. Glad I could help you feel better.

Hehe, that was super cute! I loved this story lol. It was really cute how adventurous they were and what it lead to. Nice work dude.

Ahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha....followed by...Aaaaaaawwwwwww....
Really sweet, spontaneous, and hilarious. Beautifully written, and interesting characters. I (and knew) that Wilder had the USB drive. He certainly fits the role of "Trickster", doesn't he?

Wow, thanks for the nice feedback (and I am, of course, glad that you liked it!).

I edited and rewrote this piece a lot, mainly for thematic and pacing purposes. It sounds like a lot of the things I'd been worrying about were addressed at least in part. That makes me feel better. :)

I am outrageously late in commenting on this, but I agree on Blender's part. One thing that truly makes this story great is its pacing. Absolutely none of it feels contrived, rushed, or forced. It feels... natural, all the way through. And for a story of this length (because it's pretty damn long), achieving the right consistency FOR that pacing must have been... really difficult. I imagine I probably would have had a bit of trouble with that, myself, because this is pretty much a balancing act. :)

And I also really love the characters. I don't really agree with a couple people saying that Dyki seems flattish. I mean, as a reader, we know who he is, we know what he wants, and what know what he's trying to do; we know his motivations for doing what he's doing, and he constantly projects that onto Wilder when they meet. So, no, I don't think he's flat at all; I think both characters are pretty well-rounded and fleshed out. They're real, dude. :) So yeah, as I said before, great story!

I thought it was very cute and well written. I'd like to see more of these characters, perhaps not in a sequel per se, but at least mentioned in another story in the same universe. :)

Loved it! ^^ Great story, finally some good grammar all the other ones are sloppy. Make some more!

I had to check this out causa' the Ursa awards. I enjoyed this story; s'definitely a feel-good. Oratleast', made me feel good. I have to admit, I was imagining this piece to be cliché, but you did away with that presumption quickly. S'great. I certainly don't regret staying up late to read it, and I would certainly do it again.

Good luck with the awards!

This had to be the cutest, and best ended short stories I've read. Such a good read!

Thanks! That's a wonderful compliment!

I read this last night and have been trying to think of a comment that says something more than "this is awesome!" and have been coming up blank.

I really like this story, it's so sweet and heartwarming. It pulled me out of a bit of a slump I was having and had me smiling the entire evening and into the enxt day too :)

Thank ou so much for writing it!

Aw, hey, thanks! I'm glad that you liked the story, and I'm happy to hear that it made you feel better. Hearing that makes me all waggy.:3

(Also, hey, if you were interested, this story's actually been nominated for an Ursa Major Award. The voting's still open for another week, so if you wanted to swing by there (and check out the other nominees, which are also really great), there's that, too.)

Aw, hey, thanks! I'm glad that you liked the story, and I'm happy to hear that it made you feel better. Hearing that makes me all waggy.:3

(Also, hey, if you were interested, this story's actually been nominated for an Ursa Major Award. The voting's still open for another week, so if you wanted to swing by there (and check out the other nominees, which are also really great), there's that, too.

I SO wanna read this after seeing all the comments here, but I don't have a pdf downloaded on my blackberry--those downloads cost money. ;_; Do you have a Word version of this?

I do! Send me a note with your email and I can send it to you.

Thankies! ^w^ My email's on my user page.

Wonderfully written; excellent job with this... certainly caught that sense of self-consciousness really...

As I said, excellent job. =]

I love this story so much. the characters are well written and you seem to have captured the worries of a college student perfectly.

Thanks! Having been out of college for about a decade, myself, I'm glad I'm still able to get into the right mindset. I'm glad I'm able to still feel young. :)

I was cute, I really enjoyed how you wrote Wilder and his body language especially.

The style could work a little better, perhaps a little more insight on character's personal P.O.V than narrative? Some of the dialogue felt a bit cliche, but other than that I think you really got the characters across well enough over a short story.

*It. >u<;; Wheheh, typos are hard to avoid sometimes.

Haha! I LOVE these kinds of short stories based off of real life situations ^_^

I have a habit of writing comments about the story as I go (I have this Compulsion to talk to people about stories as I read them lol). I just got to the part where Dyki was finishing his options of "Where did the flashdrive go?" and Its Hilarious! "Or it vanished into thin air as the universe's way of spitting on him"
XD

Oh yea, how exactly do you pronounce 'Dyki'?

ooooooooh! I love this ^_^
I just got past the part of Dyki's twisted ankle

Its like, my idea of a perfect... well everything!
I may take Wilder's advice and just take a day off to be a kid again

I love this story sooooooo much!
Its exactly what I've been forgetting about, and everything I've been looking for at the same time *starts to melt*


...You know, its funny. The person I admire in that kind of way in fact goes to Pittsburgh (I know its not actually supposed to be Pittsburgh in the story, but you had said the illustration was based off of the skyline), has red hair, and is a bit on the chubby side. OH, and we live 3 hours away from it as well

DAWWWWWWW
Why is it over?

Its okay, its a perfect length, and EXACTLY what I needed. Thanks for the story, I loved it :D

Thanks for reading and commenting on my story! I'm glad you liked it so much, and that you found a lot of things to identify with in it. As a writer, that's one of the best things to hear from a reader.

Also, to answer one of your earlier questions: "Dyki" is meant to rhyme with "sneaky."

Oh good because thats how I was pronouncing it

And your more than welcome ^_^

Some how I can't help but see you mostly as the fox in this story. This story only reinforces how much one should not trust a fox though. It is incredibly playful and I think highlights a very zen frame of mind, the whole going with the flow sort of thing. I think it also plays out like every college gay boy's romantic wet dream. Though man this entire story was really fun to read. Makes me want this sort of thing to pan out in my own life, and made it seem like it was my own life in certain ways. Isn't that the point of writing anyway?

i wonder what part of you is the husky though? I guess we start to delve a bit deeper into the characters psyche is where the real interesting stuff start to break down, as well as the roles each of the characters play. It seems like the fox for the most part is leading the chase. I hesitate to use the word dominate, but definitely sly. Talking that husky into a lot, yet as readers we get the vibe that the husky really wants to be talked into these situations. Also get the vibe that the fox likes to be chased, yet has to provoke enough interest to lead to this chase. Push too far and the chase is off, the husky leaves. There is that tension in the story.

Also I dig the subtle romance of this piece. It expresses this innocent sexuality that is definitely flirtatious but at the same time not hit you over the head with inneundo. You do draw a lot of attention to the physicality of the fox, but not that much of the husky. You mention several times how chubby the fox is and yet the husky, what does he look like? We are forced to assume average. But what is average? There is a lot of self control in this piece though. There are a lot of points where the intensity and passion could be pushed a whole lot further and yet you hold back. Purrhaps this is the fox in you, the whole chase me while I tease you mentality. You give the reader what they want, but not a lot of it.

My major qualms with this story stem from the slight flatness of husky. This is resolved a lot in the final scene but the fox definitely steals the lime light in this piece. The husky is more of a backdrop for the fox and his personality. Whats that word, oh yeah, a foil. The fox is so vibrant and playful, the story definitely revolves around him and the mystery of him. The husky we see as a glum character slowly coming out (HA) of his shell. Obsessed with work. But what personality? The fox has much more flair.

I dig the concept of the story though, the idea of this wish fulfillment. I guess perfection is in the flaws. My favorite part of the story is when the husky rolls his ankle. I think the deepest tenderness is expressed in that scene, with just a blush of sexuality. You are very good at that too, making tender moments slightly sexual but not overt.

I would say 4.5/5. That chubby fox is cute.

Worth it to read a good furry short story that has no glaring sexual content. I mean, not that sexual content is bad, but I like the subtle amount that's present here.

But I have to agree with Mikha above me. Dyki just seems a little flat of a character. Otherwise, great job.

Ohhhhhhhh

I went to Pittsburgh over the weekend, and I rode that "incline train" up to Mt. Washington and saw the skyline. And then I remembered this lovely story and it made me so happy and warm inside ^^

For some reason it's not loading for me, do you have another copy or something?

Do you have Adobe Reader installed? It seems to be loading fine on my end.

Ah now it's working, but yeah i did have it, but for some reason it wasn't loading in the web page. I had to "save link as" and open it on my computer :3

Oh, good! Glad you were able to make it work for you. And I hope you enjoy(ed) reading it!

Actually, I've read this story before but it was a really long time ago, so this was my second time reading it. Just a few days ago I remembered your story, but I forgot the title, which wasn't very good when I tried to look for it. But luckily I found it again and refreshed my memory. I am honestly looking forward to reading the sequel if there is going to be one :3

It won't open. I wanna read it because of the comments! ◕ ‿ ◕

Try saving the document to your hard drive and opening it manually instead of via the browser.

Wonderful story! Once I stared reading I couldn't put it down.

Still one of my favorites. Just saying.

Aww, thanks! I appreciate you swinging by to say that!