The first three stanzas came out quite well, the last two just didn't fully translate. There's enough there to tell that it's definitely a gorgeous piece of writing, Khisa. I REALLY wish I could speak German so I could read it the way it's supposed to be. I think the third stanza is my favourite, fire comparisons have been a staple of this kind of verse since time immemorial. :)

I like it, even if it didn't translate all the way. Good work, Khisa!

i strongly agree with this comment

Thanks to you, too! :)

Yes, I know that this is not... well - it just does not translate as well because if I translate it "nicer" or more "even" it changes its meaning, and the other thing is some things cannot be translated at all *sigh* - and I'm the author, I still prefer the meaning over the "being nice or even".

So thank you for your compliment - I know it's flaws ^^""

Well, like we've spoken of before, poetry and song just doesn't translate right. Even the best translations always lose something, and in a poem like this with a lot of conoted meaning, it's going to lose a lot. I think you did a very good job of keeping the meaning intact, and I agree that it's preferable to losing it in the interest of a better 'sounding' piece of writing. :) I like it.

Thank you :)