Ooooh.

Bunners

Thank you deer doe :)

I hope you have many stories to tell this year!

Here's to another year!

"Currently in the tent we identify the storyteller getting ready. " ~ This is a bad narrative shift that leads to conflict of voice, tense, chronology, and the rhetorical wall.



Gold on the showing of teeth, great thinking in the anthropomorphic.


The advanced thought:
We have a far flung post tramutized earth with now free genetic stock and humans who have survived. The university man uses a fae tale to anthropomorphic people who live in a heavy dosage of Cherokee. Yet it is not a Asgina tale. The true fae tale perseveres after the world has died and born again and the "other gets it." To most viewers, its a whatever.. to knowledgably viewers the holes and the questions are going to appear through the cracks. Of course this is a short story within a story within a larger body of work where these things can be more elaborated on. Just holding the mirror to make note in large body of work you pay attention to the relationship of these things. Its mucky but it is where the tale can be reinforced to greater strength or accidently pop out the seems.


Also good work on the internal characterization.

You know, I felt there was things wrong but I couldn't put my finger on them. I can see what you mention is a major problem and yes. My feelings was such that it was around that area.

One of the major things with this story, was wishing to learn how to portray the individual plentycael species, and how humans should behave around them as well. It is so tricky, and goes against what we grow up with. But I also wanted to show how the plentycaels act too, from the POV of a human.

Thank you for that! I was really writing blind on this story since I had no real idea how to write a frame, storytelling story. The only reference came from the DVD set of Jim Henson's "The Storyteller" A delightful series.

Again, thank you! I've only had one class on public speaking and communications, it seems to have helped.

Go granny!

(giggles) Thank you.

Now that was wonderful....

V.

Thank you deer. I know there is a few minor problems with it. I could see and feel that even before I posted it;  helixthefallen found one big one. But I'm glad you enjoyed it :).

I truly did...

V.

Thank you! One of the main goals of the story was to show Plentycaels from the POV of humans to let human readers understand them too. I always want to write these as truly uplifted animals, with an animal mind just behind the sapient. Hence like the line "careful not to show teeth". Only now am I starting to understand the other species, along with my own Anikawi -- as I've been learning since the days of 'H8".

As for the tale, that video was a delight. When I first saw it this story immediately came to mind. But actually writing it was a challenge, because I was sort of writing blind. I had no real idea how to write a storyteller story, and only had Jim Henson's "The Storyteller" DVDS to give me some idea. A delightful set of videos I'd strongly recommend to anyone.

Thank you very much :). I didn't quite grow up with the muppets myself, but that series was really well done. It was more adult than children. I know it was on You tube before (where I first learned about it.) then of course it's been yanked. The only thing I can find with it, is here:

https://www.youtube.com/results?sea.....ler+jim+henson

A series of 5 minute clips of it. But still well done. It uses the puppets in only non-human roles it appears.