"Damn," *pulls toothpick out of mouth* Beautifully well done amazing environment detail description. I haven't detail description like that since Gemmel. The whole room you crafted with animism and feel, clearly to be imagined. So great job their.
Now not to speak things profanely, now this is probably because its your first chapter and it is a common occurring problem among developing writers, so not a big deal, your characters are lacking depth and development at the moment, however they do seem somewhat rounded at the moment, so over the next couple of parts is your chance to exploit that depth and develop them into remembered and well liked individuals.
Beyond that your beginning is one of the most important parts of any written work, a total plunge for your audience.
Your opening sentence and paragraph was not the strongest. Opening with description can turn off a reader rather fast and lose an audience. There are many approaches to a greater beginning the most common and captivating seem to be action, questioning , and novelty.
Still, great job with this it has tons of potential, keep up the grand work, if you need help or want to discuss writing or literature workings with me shoot me a message. Best of luck with the rest.

Wow, very well-written descriptions! Everything could be pictured (or heard) so well. I really enjoyed reading this, every bit of it. Can't wait to see where this goes!