BUT

I'M ALREADY A BIRD JEEZ

Faved because

I'll turn you human so that I can turn you into a bird because I like turning people into birds, okay!?

OH NO I TURNED INTO A BORDS. O3O

I think you need to fix your smiley

This is pretty impressive. I find it very coherent and fluent, especially given the limits of the format you set.

Thank you for the kind words! I originally had an even more rigid style, going 6/4/6/4 with the 4 syllable rhymes but that proved too restrictive when I reached the third stanza so I opened it up. The pentameter is a bit flawed in a few places as a result because it was ultimately just too hard to fit it for a poem that isn't being made to be published.

Hmmm... I'm neither Human, or Avian, and yet I can fly....

What am I? XD

Nice story btw

The only possible answer is just that you aren't a bird yet. You'll see how things work soon enough.

And thanks!

Dragons posses the bird like quality of flight, just no beaks or feathers involved XD

I'm not sure, maybe you're just a confused archeopteryx.

I wouldn't mind being a bird for a few minutes, but I would not want to forget not being a bird. Who are you to deny me that right, fiend?

Uhhh... A callous and uncaring transmuter who would find such a situation hilarious even if it was at your personal expense? Especially if it was at your personal expense.

I should just start a business... Be a bird for fifty minutes! People would come and and sign up, thinking that they could have a fun and flighty time for a while, perhaps even pay a few hundred dollars. But they don't realize that they end up as a bird for well beyond fifty minutes. Quite well beyond, indeed. But hey, it's technically not lying! :]

Your pacing and rhyming scheme is fantastic. A very well written poem.

Probably my only qualms about being turned into a bird would be at least being able to pick which bird I'd turn into, and that I'd rather keep my former human memory. lol

Thank you for the kind words. I certainly agree on those points. To be able to live as a bird and still have a human sense of reason would be the most marvelous thing in the universe to me. I doubt it would work like that though, unfortunately. Having an entirely human mind in an inhuman body almost feels like a worse torture to me than having one's mind altered to fit the shape. My normal interpretation of transformation is somewhere in between, gaining a mindset of an animal as much as gaining a body (you would be thinking through an animal brain after all) but retaining memories and personality insofar as they apply.

Yeah, thats the blessing and the curse of transformation; its never so simple as "poof, you are this, go on your merry way." The concept of the animal mind and instincts but retaining the basic personality and all the memories isn't so bad though; at least I'd still be able to be around my former friends and loved ones. XD

It's the concept that I'm most interested in exploring in my writing at the moment, but it's hard to balance the themes with making it fun to read.

This is a high compliment to me since that my goal with this poem. Even just last year my writing tending to be a bit too verbose and clunky, a side effect of having so many words that I wanted to use for the sake of using them.

Thank you so much for your encouragement. It's good to know that at least a few people are looking forward to something. I've been in a bit of the slump where writing is concerned over the last few months which is why I started drawing... But with this new project I'll be sure to have some more serious stories soon.

super awesome Rio approves!!

Haha, of course Rio approves! If he didn't I would start to question if it was actually rio at all... Or just some strange person disguising himself with a rio-shaped suit.

This is a touch dark in all the right ways and very neat ♥

Almost a Kirkish poem, one might say.

excellent. turn everyone into birds!

But then being a bird won't be cool anymore :<

It's like listening to green day before they were popular then finding out how uncool they are when everyone clustered around them.

ha ha ha, good point.

turn select people into birds!

Hmm, but do I want to punish idiots with avianhood or do I want to reward the worthy?

Pick at random!

That was actually pretty good, as far as poems go. Quick! Write a sonnet in this style! Compose an opera!

Hey, I wrote sonnets a few times before, I even have one about birds that I posted here ages back. A TF sonnet would be pretty fun though, I must admit.

Reelee? *Goes ruffling through Kirk's old submissions looking for it.*

THis is a great poem, though I would want to keep my human memories in tact. Besides, I can become a bird whenever I want to. So I suppose you'll have some competition if you open up that be a bird for 50 minutes business.

But competition is the sort of thing that I would have to eliminate.

True, but I think you'd have a hard time eliminating this particular kitsune. I can be very powerful when I choose to be. Though I could also make a powerful ally. We could merge businesses!

Uhhhhhhhhh.......

what's with the "uhhhhhhhhhhhhh.......?"

Very Nicely done :)

I really liked this, and impressed that it's in poetry from, but not being a huge fan of writing, I can't say much more than that apart from faved.

^v^;

Hawk.

Yay! Now I can be a full birdy, its my wish come true! :D

It's the best wish that one can have.

birds wings flap gently
feathers where none were before
no recollection

Haiku 2 u

Very impressive! Definitely not something I've seen before!

Dominus tecum

Don't know why I haven't faved this ages ago

You have turned me into a bird.

A bird that eats other birds.

You are also a bird.

OMNOMNOM.

OMG after reading this I have discovered that i am a bird.
Clearly this is a cursed poem

Heh. maybe its time to change from orca back to swan for a bit at the very least. I actually recall reading this poem quite some time ago and enjoying it profusely, but for whatever reason spaced commenting or faving it... It happens I suppose.

I'm... not sure if I would want to forget my past life or not: on one hand, I'll always be a bit scarred by my human life due to various nastiness, though this is merely a quality right now: I'm not here to spout angst. If I became a bird with all my past memories, I might be too jaded to enjoy it fully.

On the other hand, if I lose all my memories, I'll likely be happier for it, ignorance is bliss and all that, but I also forget why I wanted to be a bird in the first place: truely, wouldn't it be tragically ironic if I started wanting to be a human as a bird? (assuming humans still exist after your spell;> )

*ponders* in a pinch, I suppose I'd try a full reboot instead of repair... might not be the perfect solution, but it does sound easier to pull off.

All in all, a fun poem. I do wonder though, what are your main gripes for general tf stories nowadays? I'm guessing the smut aspect for starters, but I wager there is more to it than that.

I wouldn't call it a tf story, but I made a rather long physical description for a werespider not to long ago, which, once I realized its wordy and detailed nature, I shifted its feel to a sort of scientific summary document. I might make a point to write a similar general document for werebirds in the future and pester you to take a look: in particular I enjoy mulling over solid hybridization that takes into consideration biology that's properly compatible with physics (what little I'm aware of on those two topics at least ).

So yeah, I'm also over-detailed and wordy in talking in general... call it a character flaw. But its a wonderful poem, so I thought I should speak up!

wow! if this poem is magical. it will transformed me into a falcon or raven. that would be cool.

You can't force a shapeshifter...oh crap. <spell takes full effect> Chirp!

Love it! Excellent job on the verse as well as the subject matter! :>

I feel odd after reading this.....i dont know...caaaaww......caawwwww!

Funny, just became a bird yesterday. ^v^