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Since the giant tortoise was in Baton Rouge, the Camo soldiers began their internet search with the website of The Advocate, the local newspaper.
They were not disappointed.
THE SAVIOR OF THE I-10!! blared one of the article titles with a picture of what was clearly the kaiju's head.
Clicking on the article, they were treated with the more complete picture of the kaiju putting himself under a visibly broken part of the elevated portion of the Interstate 10 leading to the Horace Wilkinson Bridge.
The article explained how a combo of works of reparation and an accident almost led to a portion of the freeway collapsing, and how the tortoise put himself underneath to sustain it the time people got the hell out, before bringing softly the broken part of road to the ground so it wouldn't collapse on people.
Like the rooster in Boise, this heroic action brought the kaiju gratitude and admiration from the locals, who called him Horace in reference to the bridge.
"Why do they play heroes?" wondered a Camo soldier. "I mean, in movies..."
"We're not in a movie here, private," spat Offick. "Although it's a good question..."
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Since the giant tortoise was in Baton Rouge, the Camo soldiers began their internet search with the website of The Advocate, the local newspaper.
They were not disappointed.
THE SAVIOR OF THE I-10!! blared one of the article titles with a picture of what was clearly the kaiju's head.
Clicking on the article, they were treated with the more complete picture of the kaiju putting himself under a visibly broken part of the elevated portion of the Interstate 10 leading to the Horace Wilkinson Bridge.
The article explained how a combo of works of reparation and an accident almost led to a portion of the freeway collapsing, and how the tortoise put himself underneath to sustain it the time people got the hell out, before bringing softly the broken part of road to the ground so it wouldn't collapse on people.
Like the rooster in Boise, this heroic action brought the kaiju gratitude and admiration from the locals, who called him Horace in reference to the bridge.
"Why do they play heroes?" wondered a Camo soldier. "I mean, in movies..."
"We're not in a movie here, private," spat Offick. "Although it's a good question..."
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SpiderDaSquirrelHorace © me
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Hey there! So, here I am, back with another review for Kaiju Rising's Uncanny Guardians, and even better, it's another one with more creative freedom, hooray! Trust me, you got frustrated by me scrambling to point out all the repetition, believe me, it probably didn't seem it, but it wasn't great to review either. Ah well, there's only so much you can do without making it longer, but of course, making it longer is difficult without motivation. Thankfully though, you've clearly put all your motivation into the far more interesting stuff, hooray! Anyway, enough of me going on about the difficulties of writing, there's more important and interesting stuff to discuss! Speaking of which, let's jump in and get to it!
So, starting, appropriately enough, at the beginning, where Camo Squadron are searching for reports on the second Kaiju, you're already starting strong. I think it's a nice touch, including a real newspaper. Including things like real brands and real locations adds a lot to a story, especially if the story is of a more fantastical nature, such as this! If the reader is immersed in your world, then it becomes so much easier to picture the events taking place, and including things like a real newspaper covering a breaking news story of such magnitude, no pun intended, helps it all feel a lot more real. Speaking of making it all feel real, the decision to include a bridge collapse was an excellent decision in several ways. First, a bridge collapsing is undeniably a major disaster and would cause massive damage and likely a lot of casualties, so it gives a sense of danger that is in no way artificial. That is only enhanced by the second reason it works so well, which is that in the United States, infrastructure, and its deteriorating condition, has been a cause of concern for years now, and the lack of attention it's been given is likely to cause problems in the future, which could include bridge collapses, so it's a surprisingly real threat. Infrastructure: much less glamorous than Kaiju, but, ironically, in this case, far more dangerous. This segues nicely into a little bit of comedy in this situation as it happens, because if you know just how bad the American infrastructure system is, the fact that repair work was carried out at all, let alone contributed to the accident, is somewhat amusing, at least to me, in a slightly dark manner.
On a lighter note, however, despite the severity of the situation, a hero rises to the occasion! Or, perhaps, ducked, might be the more appropriate phrase! The people trapped atop that crumbling bridge owe that tortoise immensely, if he hadn't been there, well... the reports of what happened there would be much less positive. Not only was he so fast as to catch the collapsing section in time, but he was thoughtful enough to be careful when lowering it, to ensure no one down below would be hit by falling debris! That's more than a lot of people would think of in the stress of such a situation!
Rightfully so, such an impressive feat doesn't got unappreciated by the local populace, and from them, this Kaiju is bestowed the name of Horace! From their plane, Camo Squadron are dumbfounded - these immense beings, likely stronger than they could imagine, bigger than they ever had imagined before except in Hollywood movies, are now defying every expectation set by those very movies! Of course, as Offick promptly points out, this is the real world, of course! That's another nice little touch, I like it when characters do that, heh. Although, the soldier does raise an interesting point. Such intelligence... where could these beings have possibly come from, and what could have possibly caused this... questions that the Squadron must investigate and find the answers to...
All in all, this was an absolutely brilliant chapter. There's no grammatical errors that I could see, the situation is believable and carries a genuine real-life threat, honestly, the only thing I can even suggest 'improving' is the description of what happened during the incident, like the road crumbling and collapsing and what it would be like for people on foot and in vehicles as Horace supports the section on his back - I'm guessing it would be like a bouncy castle or something, just not in a good way - and honestly, I'm only really suggesting that because, well, to be honest with you, I'm really struggling for something to suggest, and I feel like I should, for whatever odd reason. It's not even something that needs changing, I just felt it might be nice to have really. That's all I could suggest honestly, so take pride in knowing that you've done such an excellent job! See, all that creative freedom is really paying dividends!
I'll catch you for the next review as soon as I can! Until then, take care man, and have a great day!
So, starting, appropriately enough, at the beginning, where Camo Squadron are searching for reports on the second Kaiju, you're already starting strong. I think it's a nice touch, including a real newspaper. Including things like real brands and real locations adds a lot to a story, especially if the story is of a more fantastical nature, such as this! If the reader is immersed in your world, then it becomes so much easier to picture the events taking place, and including things like a real newspaper covering a breaking news story of such magnitude, no pun intended, helps it all feel a lot more real. Speaking of making it all feel real, the decision to include a bridge collapse was an excellent decision in several ways. First, a bridge collapsing is undeniably a major disaster and would cause massive damage and likely a lot of casualties, so it gives a sense of danger that is in no way artificial. That is only enhanced by the second reason it works so well, which is that in the United States, infrastructure, and its deteriorating condition, has been a cause of concern for years now, and the lack of attention it's been given is likely to cause problems in the future, which could include bridge collapses, so it's a surprisingly real threat. Infrastructure: much less glamorous than Kaiju, but, ironically, in this case, far more dangerous. This segues nicely into a little bit of comedy in this situation as it happens, because if you know just how bad the American infrastructure system is, the fact that repair work was carried out at all, let alone contributed to the accident, is somewhat amusing, at least to me, in a slightly dark manner.
On a lighter note, however, despite the severity of the situation, a hero rises to the occasion! Or, perhaps, ducked, might be the more appropriate phrase! The people trapped atop that crumbling bridge owe that tortoise immensely, if he hadn't been there, well... the reports of what happened there would be much less positive. Not only was he so fast as to catch the collapsing section in time, but he was thoughtful enough to be careful when lowering it, to ensure no one down below would be hit by falling debris! That's more than a lot of people would think of in the stress of such a situation!
Rightfully so, such an impressive feat doesn't got unappreciated by the local populace, and from them, this Kaiju is bestowed the name of Horace! From their plane, Camo Squadron are dumbfounded - these immense beings, likely stronger than they could imagine, bigger than they ever had imagined before except in Hollywood movies, are now defying every expectation set by those very movies! Of course, as Offick promptly points out, this is the real world, of course! That's another nice little touch, I like it when characters do that, heh. Although, the soldier does raise an interesting point. Such intelligence... where could these beings have possibly come from, and what could have possibly caused this... questions that the Squadron must investigate and find the answers to...
All in all, this was an absolutely brilliant chapter. There's no grammatical errors that I could see, the situation is believable and carries a genuine real-life threat, honestly, the only thing I can even suggest 'improving' is the description of what happened during the incident, like the road crumbling and collapsing and what it would be like for people on foot and in vehicles as Horace supports the section on his back - I'm guessing it would be like a bouncy castle or something, just not in a good way - and honestly, I'm only really suggesting that because, well, to be honest with you, I'm really struggling for something to suggest, and I feel like I should, for whatever odd reason. It's not even something that needs changing, I just felt it might be nice to have really. That's all I could suggest honestly, so take pride in knowing that you've done such an excellent job! See, all that creative freedom is really paying dividends!
I'll catch you for the next review as soon as I can! Until then, take care man, and have a great day!
"So, starting, appropriately enough, at the beginning, where Camo Squadron are searching for reports on the second Kaiju, you're already starting strong. I think it's a nice touch, including a real newspaper. Including things like real brands and real locations adds a lot to a story, especially if the story is of a more fantastical nature, such as this! If the reader is immersed in your world, then it becomes so much easier to picture the events taking place, and including things like a real newspaper covering a breaking news story of such magnitude, no pun intended, helps it all feel a lot more real."
That was the intention
"That is only enhanced by the second reason it works so well, which is that in the United States, infrastructure, and its deteriorating condition, has been a cause of concern for years now, and the lack of attention it's been given is likely to cause problems in the future, which could include bridge collapses, so it's a surprisingly real threat. Infrastructure: much less glamorous than Kaiju, but, ironically, in this case, far more dangerous. This segues nicely into a little bit of comedy in this situation as it happens, because if you know just how bad the American infrastructure system is, the fact that repair work was carried out at all, let alone contributed to the accident, is somewhat amusing, at least to me, in a slightly dark manner."
That was accidental, that. I didn't know that
"All in all, this was an absolutely brilliant chapter. There's no grammatical errors that I could see, the situation is believable and carries a genuine real-life threat, honestly, the only thing I can even suggest 'improving' is the description of what happened during the incident, like the road crumbling and collapsing and what it would be like for people on foot and in vehicles as Horace supports the section on his back - I'm guessing it would be like a bouncy castle or something, just not in a good way - and honestly, I'm only really suggesting that because, well, to be honest with you, I'm really struggling for something to suggest, and I feel like I should, for whatever odd reason. It's not even something that needs changing, I just felt it might be nice to have really. That's all I could suggest honestly, so take pride in knowing that you've done such an excellent job! See, all that creative freedom is really paying dividends!"
They're reading reports and news about it, and going straight to the point, so I don't feel the need to add these details
Glad you loved it, can't wait for the next review as always!
See ya! ^^
That was the intention
"That is only enhanced by the second reason it works so well, which is that in the United States, infrastructure, and its deteriorating condition, has been a cause of concern for years now, and the lack of attention it's been given is likely to cause problems in the future, which could include bridge collapses, so it's a surprisingly real threat. Infrastructure: much less glamorous than Kaiju, but, ironically, in this case, far more dangerous. This segues nicely into a little bit of comedy in this situation as it happens, because if you know just how bad the American infrastructure system is, the fact that repair work was carried out at all, let alone contributed to the accident, is somewhat amusing, at least to me, in a slightly dark manner."
That was accidental, that. I didn't know that
"All in all, this was an absolutely brilliant chapter. There's no grammatical errors that I could see, the situation is believable and carries a genuine real-life threat, honestly, the only thing I can even suggest 'improving' is the description of what happened during the incident, like the road crumbling and collapsing and what it would be like for people on foot and in vehicles as Horace supports the section on his back - I'm guessing it would be like a bouncy castle or something, just not in a good way - and honestly, I'm only really suggesting that because, well, to be honest with you, I'm really struggling for something to suggest, and I feel like I should, for whatever odd reason. It's not even something that needs changing, I just felt it might be nice to have really. That's all I could suggest honestly, so take pride in knowing that you've done such an excellent job! See, all that creative freedom is really paying dividends!"
They're reading reports and news about it, and going straight to the point, so I don't feel the need to add these details
Glad you loved it, can't wait for the next review as always!
See ya! ^^
Hey there!
Yes, a brilliant chapter all around! Not adding those details, yeah, totally fair. You're quite right, that is the whole point of the chapter, so yes, adding those details is not necessary.
Plus, hey, learning things about the world, hooray.
Take care, and see you next time!
Yes, a brilliant chapter all around! Not adding those details, yeah, totally fair. You're quite right, that is the whole point of the chapter, so yes, adding those details is not necessary.
Plus, hey, learning things about the world, hooray.
Take care, and see you next time!
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