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dont no what the 10/16/09 9:36 PM is about but oh well whatever ^^
XD i no quick right LOL i was asked by a dear friend to "WRITE NOW OF I KEEIILLL UUU!!!" lol geezz peer prusure? lol i dont no if u guys are going to like this very much its not very funny yet, but u no me it will get very VERY funny just gotta get some character development in there
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XD i no quick right LOL i was asked by a dear friend to "WRITE NOW OF I KEEIILLL UUU!!!" lol geezz peer prusure? lol i dont no if u guys are going to like this very much its not very funny yet, but u no me it will get very VERY funny just gotta get some character development in there
now its
CmdrQuartz's turn to write have fun buddy ^^
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Nice writing there, there were a few spelling and gramatical errors. (what writing program are you using? if you wrote it in Word then a spellcheck would fix that up easily)
and the language and perspective were a little awkward at times, (suddenly switching from 3rd to 1st perspective when Badassial [awesome name by the way] was introduced)
But overall, the underlying story and the nice little plot twist worked well.
and the language and perspective were a little awkward at times, (suddenly switching from 3rd to 1st perspective when Badassial [awesome name by the way] was introduced)
But overall, the underlying story and the nice little plot twist worked well.
Like was said before, there were a few spelling and grammar errors but they were forgivable to the point where you could decipher what the word was supposed to be. I really like this though! I don't read a lot because not a lot catches my interest. With this though, I find myself wanting to read more and more! So awesome job Xizzy!
*Goes to read next chapter*
*Goes to read next chapter*
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