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Soi Brothers - Part 1 by Raistlinhawke. Critique Requested.
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Raistlinhawke, the first part of his Soi Brothers stories has been uploaded here. He's looking for a little feedback to help him on his way, so don't be shy, everyone!
Raistlinhawke, the first part of his Soi Brothers stories has been uploaded here. He's looking for a little feedback to help him on his way, so don't be shy, everyone!
Category Story / Miscellaneous
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 29 kB
Hmmm, not as long as I thought.
Well, finally got around to reading this. Not too bad, not a fan of contemporary fiction but I can see the seed of something interesting here. For the most part I have to echo what RisingTempest said, the characters could use more description; especially about the history between them. The dialog suggests a lot more then what we're seeing.
Well, finally got around to reading this. Not too bad, not a fan of contemporary fiction but I can see the seed of something interesting here. For the most part I have to echo what RisingTempest said, the characters could use more description; especially about the history between them. The dialog suggests a lot more then what we're seeing.
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