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this is my first chapter rewritten in better detail but is not finnished please comment and give pointers.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 2.2 kB
dyamn, boy you changed that up well and fast. Were the crap did you improve like that? Way better detail. However your explaining what a howler is destroyes the flow, it is best to let the reader discover that prospect through the evolution of the story development, makes for a more intreasting read.
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