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The Tales of the Elven Kingdom (rough WIP, need feedback<3))
This is an old one I did in 2011.
I thought you guys could be so nice and give me some feedback on this. Maybe where I could go with these lyrics. (I guess I should read more fantasy novels ′°~°` )
I really had no idea where to go with this anymore.
I'd be really thankful for any feedback here.
This will go into scraps later.
I thought you guys could be so nice and give me some feedback on this. Maybe where I could go with these lyrics. (I guess I should read more fantasy novels ′°~°` )
Lyrcis:
The woods of Elves are forsaken
(forever and ever)
The trees are alive but the folks are deceased, all dead.
Just carnage and gore limn the end of the lore
and only reminicents remain
Just a lonesome piper
tells the glorious days or yore
rotten ruins are the only wittness
of an empire, which is no more
ignore the rest^^
I really had no idea where to go with this anymore.
I'd be really thankful for any feedback here.
This will go into scraps later.
Category Music / Rock
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Size 120 x 120px
File Size 1.22 MB
I really really love this! The harmony is great the timbre is fantastic and I really like how the song progresses ^^ My one thought perhaps would be maybe the drums could be livened up a bit ^^ Aside from that though I absolutely love this and hope that ya take this and do something with it if you decide you want to
Oh. Okay. I guess I felt quite like that, after I wrote these parts. But meanwhile the flames had died down a little. I also have been playing this to a former band member of mine - a band, which general theme also was like medieval and fantasy. He said that he liked it, but he didn't quite give me enough incentive to carry it on, let alone encouraging me to showing it to my other band members. It was a metal band after all, so maybe that is why.
I'm not really concerned about the drums at this stage. Thank you for offering critique, though.
Just one thing, no one needs to handle me with kid gloves, when it comes to critique.
I want to thank you a lot for the overall encouragement.
Just yesterday I was visited by my guitar teacher, who I earlier was talking to about developing one of my ideas into a song, and he told me, that another idea was his first choice.
That (link), BTW actually was the idea of choice that we agreed on.
I'm not really concerned about the drums at this stage. Thank you for offering critique, though.
Just one thing, no one needs to handle me with kid gloves, when it comes to critique.
I want to thank you a lot for the overall encouragement.
Just yesterday I was visited by my guitar teacher, who I earlier was talking to about developing one of my ideas into a song, and he told me, that another idea was his first choice.
That (link), BTW actually was the idea of choice that we agreed on.
Ah, 2011. That was a while back.
You know, I actually like those lyrics. In terms of structure, you got a nice contrasting section for the B, after you repeat it a second time you can probably go back to the A and then finish out the song.
In terms of the lyrics, I mean, you already wrote half of the song. What if... a hero emerges, the last elf, and returns to the forest to defeat the orcs who destroyed his people?
You know, I actually like those lyrics. In terms of structure, you got a nice contrasting section for the B, after you repeat it a second time you can probably go back to the A and then finish out the song.
In terms of the lyrics, I mean, you already wrote half of the song. What if... a hero emerges, the last elf, and returns to the forest to defeat the orcs who destroyed his people?
Hmm. I'd need a nice intro, outro and transitions too. + almost no good Rock song goes without a decent solo.
Also the verse seems kinda empty still ... or too plain. The drums are still boring too.
For the lyrics: I've probably read too few fantasy stories back then. I need something kinda epic, kinda lyrical. And maybe a little twist.
Thanks a lot for the input here.
Thank you for the feedback in general. Very appreciated!!!
Also the verse seems kinda empty still ... or too plain. The drums are still boring too.
For the lyrics: I've probably read too few fantasy stories back then. I need something kinda epic, kinda lyrical. And maybe a little twist.
Thanks a lot for the input here.
Thank you for the feedback in general. Very appreciated!!!
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