wow..that was something..I liked it...of course the last few words justify the means. and injoyed the ride that the story took me on

Why thank you :)

It's the prompts...i'm more than happy to meet you fellow writer....well i'm new to the prompts''
This is my third time

Was my sixth prompt, and it's always nice to hear from other writers :)

oh...well done

That was sweet. And with perfect romantic timing.

Thank you thank you :)

A lovely tale to make you smile. Any instructions on how to 'arrange' a power cut? :)

Hehe thanks :D

As for your question, no legal ways ... ;)

Enjoyable. The technical descriptions of the video game and sound system seemed a little over-the-top, not sure how much of a place that kind of language has in a sweet story like this. Likewise with the last paragraph, which nearly detached me from the original scene with its neutrality. Still, good idea, good submission.

The opening paragraph was supposed to contrast with the rest of the scene between the two lovers to give the scene an added boost in warmth. I was going for the detached, mechanical interaction people have when there are electronic devices buffering them. There's only any real human emotion when the two are interacting directly with each other. The final paragraph was sort an echo of the tone of the first to try and bookend the whole thing.

I generally think of the Prompts as an opportunity to experiment with my writing. I'm going to claim lack of sleep, coming down off a caffeine rush, and general exhaustion as excuses for it not coming off that well :p

All the same, appreciate the fave :)

Hah, that's fine. x3

It's always interesting to see the ideas behind a story, even if they're not the same ideas I inferred.

It's good to open yourself up when doing these prompts, to tread new water and discover more about yourself as a writer. Still, I comment on them as if they were edited and the author fully intended it to come off as I see it in the page, because I would want someone to comment on my writing the same way. Just a "good job," gives you no idea of how they actually read your story.

Nice story. I was actually a bit surprised before the end. But I guess that's just me, as a very secular person, I don't believe in marriage. I liked the contrast between the beginning and the ending. Maybe it makes someone to think. Do we really need all the electrical toys we have? Anyway, enjoyed reading this a lot. Good work.

Yeah, I suppose my views were leaking through at the end. I don't believe marriage is uniquely a spiritual thing, really, but more of a way for two people that really love each other to be even closer. I see it as a ritualized promise and a rather beautiful expression of affection. I also believe that we're too caught up in all the electronic junk that pervades our lives, so I'm glad that contrast worked here. Thanks much :)

*hugs an uni* that was brilliant sweets.

Thanks much :D

Appreciate the Fave too ;)

*giggles softly*

Ohh, I am so tempted now to sing... "Where were you, when the lights went out, in New York City?"

A delightful little story! And 'his' mother is right with that saying, too! My proofreader eye caught only two minor typos, but that's just me; a missing space between break and through, and ceremony is not spelled with an 'i'. But that's just tiny little things that do not at all take anything away fromt he flow of this nice little story. Very well done, indeed! =^_^=

I'm awful for typos, especially since I have to copy my text into an email to check the spelling and it winds up converting it between formats. I blame that for the missing space, I always have to break up words after the spell checking is done :p

Glad you enjoyed the story overall though :)

Aw, I see! Yeh, I know what you mean. I use MS Word, and then copy into Wordpad to make it a .txt file, but luckily I have a good eye for proofreading, even if English isn't my first language =~.^=

Still, a very good story! I really enjoyed reading it! =^_^=

Ahh! If English isn't your first language, I suspect that gave you extra practice in proofreading. Lucky you! ;)

And thank you again, Love getting comments :)

*nodnods and smiles*

Yes indeed, I already have a natural eye for proofreading, and with English not being my first language but school-learned, I was taught to spot mistakes even better because of all my years of English classes =.^=

And you're welcome again! =^_^=

I like how stepping on a toy missile can lead to something much more fun. :)

Well, in my limited experience, just about anything can be the one thing that leads to another :p