Actually this is quit intreasting and you should contiue it. There is alot to reveal and many intruging concepts that need exploring.

lol. thanks. i was hoping people would take interest in it. what topic do you thinnk need exploring?

Dang the entire thing. You really don't have a plot right now and there are all sorts of paths it can take. You have some sort of anthropmorphic more animilastic character right now that were unsure of what it is. We also don't know its gender or name and has alot of character development potential. Your world seems gritty and you seem to potray it in some place in Manhattan. This gives all sorts of possible time periods , worlds, histories, appraches one can do. There are many thigns one can explore with this story.

good. i was hopimg to make the beginning very mysterious and little so that people would want to read more or make me develope it more.

i wanted to wait on the plot to see what people said, i wanted to keep what she is a secret for the first chapter and keep people guessing, i also wasn't sure yet how to work in what her name is. as of the approach i was also waiting on what people thought before developing it more.

-slow clapping-

clapping to what?

This is really good, is what. The ending, especially, in my opinion. I'd be offended if you didn't continue.

lol. ok i will then. i like that people are enjoying it.

That's such a sad ending ;-; I do wonder where the character will develop from here.

Possibly she'll have a humbling experience and she'll be thankful for her savior?
Possibly she'll get better and then find someone like her to save from poverty? That'd be cool :D

Also, if I can give some good-hearted critique, you should start on improving your stories by spacing between paragraphs, and capitalizing your 'I's. If your stories are easier on the eyes, they become more fun and gripping to read, without straining

You've got a lot of potential as a writer, but don't limit yourself to just one story :) Write whatever satisfies your urges to write, whenever you need.

ah. there fixed the text. better?

That is fantastic ^^