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Now well settled into the Guide Dog Halfway House, Chris has some fun discovering what he's good at, and getting down to choosing a name for himself. Yet, it's not all fun and games. Chris faces his first real trial, in the form of a self-appointed guardian, who claims to only have his best interests, at heart. And Dave can only watch, helpless.
Thank you, everyone for your generous comments, and for faving "The Diary of Chris Mouse, and the first half of this one. You have no idea just how big a kick it gives me, knowing people are actually moved, in some small way, by my writing. As I stated last time, there is a lot of homage in here, to old characters of mine and previous incarnations of my fursona. Including Shawnie, herself, who was our first, RL dog.
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Thank you, everyone for your generous comments, and for faving "The Diary of Chris Mouse, and the first half of this one. You have no idea just how big a kick it gives me, knowing people are actually moved, in some small way, by my writing. As I stated last time, there is a lot of homage in here, to old characters of mine and previous incarnations of my fursona. Including Shawnie, herself, who was our first, RL dog.
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Category Story / Pregnancy
Species Mouse
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File Size 7.9 kB
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Well, now I have to watch you to see how this turns out. At the very beginning I wasn't very interested, considering how many hundreds of furry transformation stories there are, but I was hooked more than well enough to read all of it! It made me smile a couple times, which is always nice. ^^
My only real criticism is how quickly you brought in the... mouse-isms, without any explanation. Chris was only a mouse for a short time, without any socialization with other mice, and he was using, "Cheese" as a euphemistic swear word? Kind of doesn't fit, chronologically, unless this is a wonderfully subtle clue of some sort... ^^;
My only real criticism is how quickly you brought in the... mouse-isms, without any explanation. Chris was only a mouse for a short time, without any socialization with other mice, and he was using, "Cheese" as a euphemistic swear word? Kind of doesn't fit, chronologically, unless this is a wonderfully subtle clue of some sort... ^^;
That is one of the best kind of compliments. I litteally do have a voracious appitite, when it comes to books, so when I set down and write, I try as hard as I can, to give my stories that extra touch, that really makes them come alive. The fact that you came in, with strong doubts, and ended up totally hooked, means I'm doing something right. I've been writing for three days straight now, because of comments like yours.
That is a very excelent question. Thank you, for asking. For the moment, it's merely the word, "jeeze". Why sounds more like "Cheese" could have any one of a dozen logical explanations, without him nesescarily having to be around mice. The simplest answer is that as a mouse, Chris might tend to pronouce his "J"s, with more of a "Ch" sound, and it's simply most obvious, with that word, in perticular.
That is a very excelent question. Thank you, for asking. For the moment, it's merely the word, "jeeze". Why sounds more like "Cheese" could have any one of a dozen logical explanations, without him nesescarily having to be around mice. The simplest answer is that as a mouse, Chris might tend to pronouce his "J"s, with more of a "Ch" sound, and it's simply most obvious, with that word, in perticular.
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