Furtasian Tails Prologue 6: Despair of a Knight
The last of the prologue chapters, this one is the sad tale of Sir Bernard Thornton. Next installment of this story will be the first real chapter, where we'll meet out main character.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 93 x 120px
File Size 7.3 kB
Well, I like that this is a dying earth esque tail with a nice dose of Norton thrown in.
Not sure about the use of the term furry for the anthropomorphic race being self-referral, but as the years have ticked by in the fandom and people have switched the long A words for just plain old furry for every anthropomorphic animal I guess I’m beginning to buy the argument instead of cracking a whip to avoid fandom slang like the plague.
I do enjoy that peaceful juxtaposition between the mythology brimming with hope and mystery and turning well into violence on the first page, it gives a lot for your reader to think on.
Not sure of this long and broken apart prologue from a flow and organization stand point, but if you are following a single character for the rest of the book, it works out.
Your action description is good. When writing anthropomorphic characters though fleshing them out so your audience can know their faces is something to work on. It’s easy to just write something off as just poodle or big cat, but reinforcing the anthropomorphism and characters as individuals can bring a lot for your audience and world building.
Still, great start, best and good luck with the rest of it.
Not sure about the use of the term furry for the anthropomorphic race being self-referral, but as the years have ticked by in the fandom and people have switched the long A words for just plain old furry for every anthropomorphic animal I guess I’m beginning to buy the argument instead of cracking a whip to avoid fandom slang like the plague.
I do enjoy that peaceful juxtaposition between the mythology brimming with hope and mystery and turning well into violence on the first page, it gives a lot for your reader to think on.
Not sure of this long and broken apart prologue from a flow and organization stand point, but if you are following a single character for the rest of the book, it works out.
Your action description is good. When writing anthropomorphic characters though fleshing them out so your audience can know their faces is something to work on. It’s easy to just write something off as just poodle or big cat, but reinforcing the anthropomorphism and characters as individuals can bring a lot for your audience and world building.
Still, great start, best and good luck with the rest of it.
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