Too ill to really concentrate on the narrative in full, but I can compliment you on good use of character voice and accent. Your underscore-separated sections are meant to be changes of scene? I didn't pay close enough attention to where they were struck, but it seemed to be. That's OK, stylistically acceptable I guess. In text, usually just the "* * *" or ". o 0 o ." is a scene separator. Just in case you were curious.

Your descriptive prose seems colorful and sensual enough, I don't have any criticism at this point either so just good job dragon!

All the pirate-talk got annoying in some parts, even though it really helped place the scene and everything. The story was well-written throughout and it's nice to find out a bit more about Trinity's past. :D

It is nice to finally see a new story from you, especially when it starts out as good as this one has. Now I'm really looking forward to part 2.

the only real problem with this is that Trinity whent from timid to badass in like 3 seconds, there was no build up to it or anything really. not explaining about how she got this sudden fighitng ability and not narrorating from her point of view or general direction really adds to that Pirate mythos kinda thing (the myth is always greater than the man....or woman in this case)

I thought I had explained it, but I guess I forgot to write it down...

But the way I had imagined it for her was that being timid was more of an act when entering a new social environment, making the people around her believe she wouldn't fight or defend herself. Essentially letting their guard down thinking she is easy prey.

I hope that explains that.

As far as the fighting ability... Again, I thought I explained it, but either way, I was going to go more in depth with it in part 3.

lol, sometimes not explainign can be a good thing, which it worked everywhere else cept that first part IMO