Working title and working song... I'm at a standstill on this one. Friends, please I'm asking for your help and useful ideas to make this thing an actual song!

I'd like to double the length somehow, and make the transitions smoother, and I want it to rise and fall like a song ought to! Oh, and I don't like the area from 0.31 to 0.41... its not REALLY mine... its Garageband's... and I don't want to use that for my own credit.

Or maybe I don't even know what I need exactly! Please! You tell me!