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Three friends get more than they bargained for when they get a new summer job promising an "unforgettable summer"
Special thanks to:
ro-za 
daze-snow-leopard & 
overzen for making cameos.
Story by:
zephyr10101
[constructive criticism is appreciated but don't be a jerk or condescending]
*do NOT repost my work anywhere
Special thanks to:
ro-za 
daze-snow-leopard & 
overzen for making cameos.Story by:
zephyr10101[constructive criticism is appreciated but don't be a jerk or condescending]
*do NOT repost my work anywhere
Category Story / Transformation
Species Pig / Swine
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 336.5 kB
Listed in Folders
It's pretty good, great even for a first story. Just a note, you use both past and present tense which creates inconsistency. Matching your story's tense really makes a difference, believe me.
I'd give you more pointers, but I hear Uncle coming with more slop.
I'd give you more pointers, but I hear Uncle coming with more slop.
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