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The original is © Furbeat Magazine, written by Honey, a female, rabbit-morph, one of their freelance contributers.
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Poetigress , the word this week was 'Trial'. In a way, like the elephant in a block of wood, the events surrounding this story have always been there, it just needed him and me to carve away the bits that weren't needed. If this gets midly popular, I might post the second half.
I know, it's a little rough, but I've had to work every other day, this week, and I had to completely change the style of the narrative, at the last minute.
Done for
Poetigress , the word this week was 'Trial'. In a way, like the elephant in a block of wood, the events surrounding this story have always been there, it just needed him and me to carve away the bits that weren't needed. If this gets midly popular, I might post the second half. I know, it's a little rough, but I've had to work every other day, this week, and I had to completely change the style of the narrative, at the last minute.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Rabbit / Hare
Size 120 x 106px
File Size 3.5 kB
Interesting. I'm not very fascinated about this script-style writing, I would like to read it as prose, but the backstory is rather interesting and despite the rather stiff format the reader is given rather nice picture of the two characters. Also, very good approach to "trial", writing about an interview. Yup, nice work, I enjoyed reading this.
The funny thing is that this originally started out as prose, but I ran into a character conflict. Honey, the intended author and Uniprae's character, turned out to be strictly a freelance interviewer. That was the reason behind the last minute rewrite. Ironically, I was hoping this way, it would come out as warmer and more intimate. If you want to read the original, prose version, I can upload it.
Hmm, very interesting setup. You've got some serious political and religious drama occurring as the background to this story and it's very intriguing.
This is even more interesting because it does parallel real-life instances of negative views against furries. This works on the level of social commentary as well and I applaud you for touching upon that.
One small detail: When it says *click* (pause of about thirty seconds) *click* I wondered if that was a tape recorder. If so, the jump from one second to another would be instantaneous, although a gap would be noted in the conversation.
Good work!
-Vaperfox
This is even more interesting because it does parallel real-life instances of negative views against furries. This works on the level of social commentary as well and I applaud you for touching upon that.
One small detail: When it says *click* (pause of about thirty seconds) *click* I wondered if that was a tape recorder. If so, the jump from one second to another would be instantaneous, although a gap would be noted in the conversation.
Good work!
-Vaperfox
Thank you! You're the second person to comment on that, and I really appriecate it. I hadn't even thought of the real-life parallel, for once, I'm glad someone saw something in my stuff that I didn't intend. You're right, actually noting the pause between clicks isn't strictly nescesary, it's there to give the reader the idea that what he told her is fairly substantial.
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