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this started as my entry to bl00's writing contest. unfortunately, i've never written anything before, so i don't know how good this will be.
i got writer's block big time! there was going to be so much more to this...the scene where they wind up at a restaurant and accidentally start eating each other's pitas... the small child who "borrows" april's bag, but doesn't get very far... then bralth walks her home, says goodbye, realizes what an idiot he is and turns around, just in time to see april doing the same thing... i just couldn't figure out how to write all that! :(
hope you like it, bl00!
i got writer's block big time! there was going to be so much more to this...the scene where they wind up at a restaurant and accidentally start eating each other's pitas... the small child who "borrows" april's bag, but doesn't get very far... then bralth walks her home, says goodbye, realizes what an idiot he is and turns around, just in time to see april doing the same thing... i just couldn't figure out how to write all that! :(
hope you like it, bl00!
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Also, I want you to tell that I analyzed the whoile thing, and I sure hope all the metaphores were purposeful, they're brilliant and incredibly well-written. The whole first paragraph, the way I analyzed it, is a whole erotic metaphore, I love that. The colors so well-described in the second paragraph fitting April. The bug. Spring. Everything just flows so well, so naturally. You really are an incredible writer.
I apologize for the double-post, but I really wanted to give you the credit that you deserve.
I apologize for the double-post, but I really wanted to give you the credit that you deserve.
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