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This is my first submission, and that's mostly because I didn't feel like I had anything worth posting or that I felt confident posting before.
I wrote the entire story myself and created the 3D rendering myself. I used the Blender software to create the rendering. His coloration was mostly made up on the spot; he doesn't correspond to a specific species of snake.
This story is about Jeff, a human who got abducted and has his brain transplanted into a naga body. I think there's one or two swear words in the story, but there's nothing naughty. There is a small amount of violence and death, too. I wasn't planning to make a mature or adult story when I wrote it.
I wrote the entire story myself and created the 3D rendering myself. I used the Blender software to create the rendering. His coloration was mostly made up on the spot; he doesn't correspond to a specific species of snake.
This story is about Jeff, a human who got abducted and has his brain transplanted into a naga body. I think there's one or two swear words in the story, but there's nothing naughty. There is a small amount of violence and death, too. I wasn't planning to make a mature or adult story when I wrote it.
Category Story / All
Species Naga
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 360.3 kB
Listed in Folders
Ok, this has got to bee one of my favourite stories ever. It was really nice to have the story focus so much on relief workers compared with the usual TF stories that end with the protagonist becoming jaded to their terrible fate. I loved the protagonist too, I didn't feel like he made one stupid decision the whole time. There were so many points in the story where I thought "ok, don't be an idiot" and he never was. He also had a sense of humour about the whole thing, what with kicking the door being a stupid idea.
It was kind of surprising how not freaked out he was by being a naga, but considering that he had been strapped down and was aware of the fact that his body was drastically different it makes a lot of sense. And I love how his goal ends up being to improve people's opinions on non-humans and that you mention people's distrust of snakes specifically. That was basically perfectly fitted to me because that it literally the exact reason I made my fursona a naga and have tried to make him adorable.
The writing also felt really well crafted. I didn't feel like there were any extraneous scenes. Like how you had the scene of the splinters on the ground to emphasise that he was in a real physical body and that scales are not armor. Then you gave a nod back to that scene to make the relief workers seem caring by tending to it. You did that once again with the automatic door closing on him and then the scene of the relief worker holding another door open until he was all the way through.
I really just loved how not cynical this story was. Like I get so sick of hearing people complain about work and the government that it's really nice to read a story where the government is portrayed positively but flawed as it is (like with the nursing degree). And that it really more focused on people and systems actually trying to do the right thing even if the world is imperfect and no system ever will be. (seriously though... why do people bond with their friends over complaining about the customers at their jobs?)
The one little funny thing I noticed is that they went to a moon around Ragus V... But humanity has only colonised three solar systems. Why are there so many planets named Ragus? x3
So yeah, this story now has one favourite. But that actually means favourite in this case.
It was kind of surprising how not freaked out he was by being a naga, but considering that he had been strapped down and was aware of the fact that his body was drastically different it makes a lot of sense. And I love how his goal ends up being to improve people's opinions on non-humans and that you mention people's distrust of snakes specifically. That was basically perfectly fitted to me because that it literally the exact reason I made my fursona a naga and have tried to make him adorable.
The writing also felt really well crafted. I didn't feel like there were any extraneous scenes. Like how you had the scene of the splinters on the ground to emphasise that he was in a real physical body and that scales are not armor. Then you gave a nod back to that scene to make the relief workers seem caring by tending to it. You did that once again with the automatic door closing on him and then the scene of the relief worker holding another door open until he was all the way through.
I really just loved how not cynical this story was. Like I get so sick of hearing people complain about work and the government that it's really nice to read a story where the government is portrayed positively but flawed as it is (like with the nursing degree). And that it really more focused on people and systems actually trying to do the right thing even if the world is imperfect and no system ever will be. (seriously though... why do people bond with their friends over complaining about the customers at their jobs?)
The one little funny thing I noticed is that they went to a moon around Ragus V... But humanity has only colonised three solar systems. Why are there so many planets named Ragus? x3
So yeah, this story now has one favourite. But that actually means favourite in this case.
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