You have good environment description and action description to keep things moving. Work more on character description, a harder to do thing in first person. Pretty much we have our POV character and don’t know their face or name to well. When you do use character description it is fine though.
Beginnings are important as they serve to draw the audience’s attention. Think how you can move past the trope and connect it transition wise to pop more.

You make a lot of use of my.. blank sentence structure (especially back to back). Think on new ways to approach sentences.

Over all though an interesting start which can go many places.

Good luck.

Im still working on it but im not that great with grammar as im only 18 and mentally unstable.

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